KrimzonStriker
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You can enter me in after this update Iggy, I'm ashamed at how little time I've had to write up a story for a very well-deserved NES 
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TerrisH
Mischief?
OOC: shoot. been meaning to write a story ups. but been delayed. go ahead anyways.
Note to goverment: majority of the crew on my combat airships are members of the Medland naval reserves, and the medland navy has x3 the number of Griffons I have. they have also commisioned a Kracken of thier own.
Note to goverment: majority of the crew on my combat airships are members of the Medland naval reserves, and the medland navy has x3 the number of Griffons I have. they have also commisioned a Kracken of thier own.
March, Year Four
Jeremy Sieko, studying Jizyat Kalim’s mechanical limb designs, has crafted a mechanical limb to replace his crippled leg. After his recovery, inspired by tales of airships to the west, he began to design a massive floating structure held up by huge numbers of circles. Whether this farfetched idea can be realized remains to be seen.
A surprise Nihojonese attack into the Forbidden City kicked off a war between the rapidly-industrializing nation of Nihojon and its old neighbour, Singuo. Steam Soldiers performed the world’s first ever successful airdrop (out of a purchased Griffon Airship), and slaughtered the guards in the center of Singuo’s Imperial Power. The Emperor had escaped earlier, however, so the blow was not as brutal as it could have been.
Rapidly, Nihojonese troops in the north crashed into the prepared defenses of Singuo. Power and Technology versus Numbers and Terrain. Nihojon’s powerful and generally skilled armies made quick advances against Singuo. However, Nihojon quickly learned that it had overestimated its strength. Its people were still weary from the old civil war, and industrialization required many workers who were also required in the army. Nihojon’s advance stagnated, and eventually stopped altogether. The valuable Steam Soldiers were being lost at an alarming rate, due to their enemies’ increasing experience in fighting them. Only the Steam Walker remained apparently invincible to enemy fire, though it has sustained damage in some particularly dangerous situations.
However, things are bad for Singuo too. Factionalism between different high-ranking figures is beginning to split the country, though the Emperor still has enough support maintain his rule effectively.
Nathanial Allendore, a young Anglian refugee living in Vestlund, has begun to attract attention. At age 16, he is the youngest Spark discovered so far. With memories of Doctor Isaac Hayden’s genius fresh in their minds, Allendore has become something of a celebrity in the eyes of the Vestlundic public. His parents are doing their best to not let this distract Nathanial from his studies. Already the teenager has produced numerous clockwork toys, and a small service drone to work around the house.
King Octavian Germaneski has been extremely busy in Pjolaka, paying off his debt to Rossovy and reforming the country domestically. Rumour has it that he is also courting a young noblewoman from Krakow...
A mysterious figure known as ‘John the Wanderer’ has become known in northern Rossovy as a charitable wayfarer. Traveling hither and thither with a mechanical dog presumably of his own creation, he performs various good acts, though his motivations remain unclear.
Khur continues to consolidate its gains in Mavadi, which has experienced a brief period of unrest. Duria continues to wait for the hammer to fall. Unsurprisingly, Baba Khan is pushing for war immediately, while the more cautious Shah Abbas insists on patience.
On a side note, Gregore Angarine’s attempts to rescue the crew of the Pegasus failed- not because of any lack of capability on the part of himself and his allies, but because by the time he arrived, Julius Magnus and his fellow travelers had already escaped, and Turqui was in the midst of putting down a nearly-successful coup attempt.
Julius Magnus, for his part, was already in southern Rossovy by that point. His searching plans have been badly derailed, and it remains to be seen what shall be done there.
While busy times have come upon Anglia, Katherine Aylor and her apprentice of sorts, Rachel, have been in quiet mourning for Jonathan, a pilot killed in the Battle of Oxford. They are back to doing their duty for the state, although both are very quiet in public.
Former Anglia finds itself split into three different de facto nations. Eiria has become a republic, and has managed to establish itself well enough. Anglia and Scota are divided between Simon MacTavish’s Communists (The Oxfordian Anglians), and the Nobility and the Monarchy (The Kingdom of Anglia), supported heavily by the Spark, Lord Gabriel Blacktyde. Democracy is, for the time being dead to these two nations. A line of control exists between the Oxfordians and the Kingdom, passing most notably through the outskirts of London. There has been skirmishing between the two, but neither side has shown great willingness to fight, despite the fact that they are idealogical opposites. Thinkers on both sides are suggesting the construction of a wall, ostensibly to keep the other side out.
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Jeremy Sieko, studying Jizyat Kalim’s mechanical limb designs, has crafted a mechanical limb to replace his crippled leg. After his recovery, inspired by tales of airships to the west, he began to design a massive floating structure held up by huge numbers of circles. Whether this farfetched idea can be realized remains to be seen.
A surprise Nihojonese attack into the Forbidden City kicked off a war between the rapidly-industrializing nation of Nihojon and its old neighbour, Singuo. Steam Soldiers performed the world’s first ever successful airdrop (out of a purchased Griffon Airship), and slaughtered the guards in the center of Singuo’s Imperial Power. The Emperor had escaped earlier, however, so the blow was not as brutal as it could have been.
Rapidly, Nihojonese troops in the north crashed into the prepared defenses of Singuo. Power and Technology versus Numbers and Terrain. Nihojon’s powerful and generally skilled armies made quick advances against Singuo. However, Nihojon quickly learned that it had overestimated its strength. Its people were still weary from the old civil war, and industrialization required many workers who were also required in the army. Nihojon’s advance stagnated, and eventually stopped altogether. The valuable Steam Soldiers were being lost at an alarming rate, due to their enemies’ increasing experience in fighting them. Only the Steam Walker remained apparently invincible to enemy fire, though it has sustained damage in some particularly dangerous situations.
However, things are bad for Singuo too. Factionalism between different high-ranking figures is beginning to split the country, though the Emperor still has enough support maintain his rule effectively.
Nathanial Allendore, a young Anglian refugee living in Vestlund, has begun to attract attention. At age 16, he is the youngest Spark discovered so far. With memories of Doctor Isaac Hayden’s genius fresh in their minds, Allendore has become something of a celebrity in the eyes of the Vestlundic public. His parents are doing their best to not let this distract Nathanial from his studies. Already the teenager has produced numerous clockwork toys, and a small service drone to work around the house.
King Octavian Germaneski has been extremely busy in Pjolaka, paying off his debt to Rossovy and reforming the country domestically. Rumour has it that he is also courting a young noblewoman from Krakow...
A mysterious figure known as ‘John the Wanderer’ has become known in northern Rossovy as a charitable wayfarer. Traveling hither and thither with a mechanical dog presumably of his own creation, he performs various good acts, though his motivations remain unclear.
Khur continues to consolidate its gains in Mavadi, which has experienced a brief period of unrest. Duria continues to wait for the hammer to fall. Unsurprisingly, Baba Khan is pushing for war immediately, while the more cautious Shah Abbas insists on patience.
On a side note, Gregore Angarine’s attempts to rescue the crew of the Pegasus failed- not because of any lack of capability on the part of himself and his allies, but because by the time he arrived, Julius Magnus and his fellow travelers had already escaped, and Turqui was in the midst of putting down a nearly-successful coup attempt.
Julius Magnus, for his part, was already in southern Rossovy by that point. His searching plans have been badly derailed, and it remains to be seen what shall be done there.
While busy times have come upon Anglia, Katherine Aylor and her apprentice of sorts, Rachel, have been in quiet mourning for Jonathan, a pilot killed in the Battle of Oxford. They are back to doing their duty for the state, although both are very quiet in public.
Former Anglia finds itself split into three different de facto nations. Eiria has become a republic, and has managed to establish itself well enough. Anglia and Scota are divided between Simon MacTavish’s Communists (The Oxfordian Anglians), and the Nobility and the Monarchy (The Kingdom of Anglia), supported heavily by the Spark, Lord Gabriel Blacktyde. Democracy is, for the time being dead to these two nations. A line of control exists between the Oxfordians and the Kingdom, passing most notably through the outskirts of London. There has been skirmishing between the two, but neither side has shown great willingness to fight, despite the fact that they are idealogical opposites. Thinkers on both sides are suggesting the construction of a wall, ostensibly to keep the other side out.
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Stupendously Illogical Englishman
Frederick Williams
Colour: Dark Slate Grey
Nationality: Anglican
Bio: The younger brother of Peter Williams (who also had a spark), who sought a career in the military. He was Captain of the 621st Cambridge Regiment when he defected, realizing his brother was insane. When Peter died attempting an escape, Frederick gained his inheritance. He hopes to continue the Williams legacy, but first he needs to broker a peace in Anglica...
Technology: Generic
Forces: 1 'Blacktyde' class armoured train.
Enter Frederick.
Frederick Williams entered the old residence of his brother.
It was a nice estate, with a large shed in which Peter had built the Steamhulk for the first time (as well as the steam robots). Now Frederick owned everything: the estate in Rabiyya, the machines not already controlled by the army (which wasn't much), and even the staff.
Two privates in his regiment approached him.
"Sir," one said, "We found this peice of rubbish."
Williams noticed that they were carrying the dead body of Field Marshall Gaig.
"Very well, you may mulitate it as much as you want, just make sure you bury it when you're done." Frederick replied.
Gaig was remembered as a man who let his men be slaughtered, so Frederick didn't care less if his body was destroyed.
Williams entered his brother's old study and wrote three letters.
The first adressed to the caretaker, asking if he wouldn't mind returning the steam robots, frankly.
The second was to Ryan Amandeus, apoligising on the behalf of his brother and asking him to meet him at the townhall in Cambridge.
The third, to Lord Blacktyde, was much the same thing.
After the letters were posted, Frederick looked at a map of the world, and thought absently that the blank bits needed to be filled.
Colour: Dark Slate Grey
Nationality: Anglican
Bio: The younger brother of Peter Williams (who also had a spark), who sought a career in the military. He was Captain of the 621st Cambridge Regiment when he defected, realizing his brother was insane. When Peter died attempting an escape, Frederick gained his inheritance. He hopes to continue the Williams legacy, but first he needs to broker a peace in Anglica...
Technology: Generic
Forces: 1 'Blacktyde' class armoured train.
Enter Frederick.
Frederick Williams entered the old residence of his brother.
It was a nice estate, with a large shed in which Peter had built the Steamhulk for the first time (as well as the steam robots). Now Frederick owned everything: the estate in Rabiyya, the machines not already controlled by the army (which wasn't much), and even the staff.
Two privates in his regiment approached him.
"Sir," one said, "We found this peice of rubbish."
Williams noticed that they were carrying the dead body of Field Marshall Gaig.
"Very well, you may mulitate it as much as you want, just make sure you bury it when you're done." Frederick replied.
Gaig was remembered as a man who let his men be slaughtered, so Frederick didn't care less if his body was destroyed.
Williams entered his brother's old study and wrote three letters.
The first adressed to the caretaker, asking if he wouldn't mind returning the steam robots, frankly.
The second was to Ryan Amandeus, apoligising on the behalf of his brother and asking him to meet him at the townhall in Cambridge.
The third, to Lord Blacktyde, was much the same thing.
After the letters were posted, Frederick looked at a map of the world, and thought absently that the blank bits needed to be filled.
flyingchicken
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As Dr. Akira Light became busier than ever, he had to keep on shortening his notes. Nowadays, his notebooks were smaller and better organized into bigger folders (to account for the different things he had to do with them), and filled with more scribbles and arrows than actual words.
The following is taken from his "general notebook" where he writes down his priorities for the day before getting off his bed:
And here is a draft of a letter addressed to the Emperor of Singuo:
OOC: The earlier story is not yet edited (← subject to change). As evidenced in this story, the Emperor of Singuo does not die while still holding a significant power base in its end, and Akane Toyota is missing in Nihojon and her exploits are yet to be discovered.
The following is taken from his "general notebook" where he writes down his priorities for the day before getting off his bed:
Chainsaw sword ← Steam Armor
Shields and drill spears → Steam Armor
More armor → Steam Walker
Small steam-jet cannon → War Armor
Automated work → Factories and railway
Rails → North Singuo
! Electric motor in Hayden's work
! Electric motor powering palm-sized "electric fan" ↑ bigger vanes
! Akane Toyota is still missing !!!
! Repairs for Steam Walker
! Repairs for War Armor
Civilian abuse ← North Singuo
Cheap labor ← North Singuo
(→ = add to; ← = subtract from; ! = important/interesting; ↑ = escalate to)Shields and drill spears → Steam Armor
More armor → Steam Walker
Small steam-jet cannon → War Armor
Automated work → Factories and railway
Rails → North Singuo
! Electric motor in Hayden's work
! Electric motor powering palm-sized "electric fan" ↑ bigger vanes
! Akane Toyota is still missing !!!
! Repairs for Steam Walker
! Repairs for War Armor
Civilian abuse ← North Singuo
Cheap labor ← North Singuo
And here is a draft of a letter addressed to the Emperor of Singuo:
....Your Excellency,
To^The Emperor of Singuo:
In our previous correspondence, I warned you of our intent.
................................................stalled
Nihojon hasslowed down^but not stopped:
Once we have set up base in North Singuo, we will continue our assault with more ferocity than ever before.
Take my advice and surrender land and labor and I will press for a halt on our advance in Singuo.
.............................................be less lenient in the future
Fail to do so and I will^not lift a finger.; my superiors might not be, either
........will not be
Thisis^your final warning from me.
Sincerely,
Doctor Akira Light
To^The Emperor of Singuo:
In our previous correspondence, I warned you of our intent.
................................................stalled
Nihojon has
Once we have set up base in North Singuo, we will continue our assault with more ferocity than ever before.
Take my advice and surrender land and labor and I will press for a halt on our advance in Singuo.
.............................................be less lenient in the future
Fail to do so and I will^
........will not be
This
Sincerely,
Doctor Akira Light
OOC: The earlier story is not yet edited (← subject to change). As evidenced in this story, the Emperor of Singuo does not die while still holding a significant power base in its end, and Akane Toyota is missing in Nihojon and her exploits are yet to be discovered.
das
Regeneration In Process
OOC: I might not have made it very clear in the story, but the attack did already begin, though what reports al-Shamdli had received there might not be very accurate. IMHO the long wait was ridiculous enough as it was, so you might as well edit that in.
flyingchicken
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My earlier story is updated, but still incomplete. There is still much dialog missing, as well as the (rather important) plot twist at the end. Currently, the story is just peaking rising action. Still a lot of grammatical and logical errors to be addressed.
EDIT: Oh, cool, I just found a use for the tags [anchor] and [set_anchor]! EDIT2: And found a grammatical error in doing so!
EDIT: Oh, cool, I just found a use for the tags [anchor] and [set_anchor]! EDIT2: And found a grammatical error in doing so!
Kozmos
Jew Detective
Apologies for not writing anything. I havent exactly planned it to be this way, but school work is overwhelming now.
@das- Ah, I thought that Gregore Angarine was just contemplating how the invasion might go.
At any rate, Shah Abbas is holding onto his cards and stalling the invasion in an attempt to break Duria before the first shots are fired. Its fortifications aren't getting significantly stronger, and the Durian Shah's power is eroding as people become more unsure of what's happening. There is also a notable fraction of Duria (hard to judge in size) who supports joining you, due to cultural/ethnic/religious similarity and out of pragmatism. So by delaying, Abbas is working to break the nation before he even declares war.
At any rate the invasion should be taking place quite soon anyway.
@sp1023- Please, cut down on the inane comments. And please, don't respond to this with another meaningless comment.
Meaningful, genuinely amusing, or constructive things are, of course, welcome.
At any rate, Shah Abbas is holding onto his cards and stalling the invasion in an attempt to break Duria before the first shots are fired. Its fortifications aren't getting significantly stronger, and the Durian Shah's power is eroding as people become more unsure of what's happening. There is also a notable fraction of Duria (hard to judge in size) who supports joining you, due to cultural/ethnic/religious similarity and out of pragmatism. So by delaying, Abbas is working to break the nation before he even declares war.
At any rate the invasion should be taking place quite soon anyway.
@sp1023- Please, cut down on the inane comments. And please, don't respond to this with another meaningless comment.
Meaningful, genuinely amusing, or constructive things are, of course, welcome.
LittleBoots
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Until you establish some sort basis for your criticism, no you aren't allowed to criticize. Also, constructive criticism is, more or less by definition, not negative without any positive suggestions. As in, what you said was not constructive criticism.
Now, perhaps if you would like to ask Flying Chicken a question about his story that you don't understand, that would be okay. If not, try to make sure your own posts make sense before you say someone else's story makes no sense.
That's destructive criticism. And it makes perfect sense. Perhaps you would understand if you read the rest of the NES.
LittleBoots
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Wow. Well, if you don't feel like putting the effort into finding out the background to a story, how on earth do you think you have the right to even presume to say it makes no sense? Furthermore, if you are too lazy to read the background to a story, what is the point of taking part in the story, given that you will probably continue to make inane comments born of ignorance?
As to your last question, how about you exercise those eyes of yours, stop posting, and start reading. It is ridiculously easy to find out if there are any wars going on, so I'm afraid I, personally, am going to say: find out for yourself.
germanicus12
First Citizen of Rome
The Pjolokian history books are available for reading if you wish to read about the rise of Octavian. Enjoy your reading, and remember you are in a library so be quiet. 
carmen510
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OOC: sp1023, it sickens me to see you defile this holy thread of stories with spam. Begone to the Hogwarts torture chambers, where a drunken Filch will be waiting with a coat hanger and a croquet mat.
LittleBoots
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tuxedohamm
Disguised as crow.
There was a bit of commotion at the airfield. Few had seen Kate or Rachel for the past few months. Each month after the Battle of Oxford, the citizens saw less and less of Kate, and Rachel almost became the face for the two women. There were rumors passing around in the community, but only a few knew the truth.
In fact Rachel could only count about 4 other than herself who understood the truth. Kate had asked Rachel to let Ryan and Simon know just within the past week. Only two had known for longer, and they were sworn to secrecy for the duration; a midwife and a doctor who had been part of the secret since just after the war.
So when screams were heard coming from Kates housing early one April morning, a number of the men came running to find out who was hurt. Most of the women came to confirm what they heard in those screams. Kate was birthing a child.
This of course began a new round of gossip about who the father was. When no one claimed responsibility, everyone came to the only conclusion that made sense. The father had died during the war, and Rachel was now an aunt.
Rachel quietly confirmed to some at the door that Johnathan was the father of the child before letting them know that a boy had been born. Johnathan Walters Aylor would be the childs name; it came from the fathers name and family name with Kates family name.
This was one of many births to occur within the weeks preceding and after. Many who had fought in that battle were now fathers, albeit not all were still there to see their children.
These weeks were bittersweet to all involved, new life that only helped remind everyone of their losses. Yet it provided hope, it gave many something to live for and work for, a future for their children where life might be a little better.
As for Kate, she wanted only the best for Johnathan. She had many thoughts rushing through her head, and would soon be up and working on projects. For now though, she had to rest, giving birth was much harder on the body than building an airship.
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@ Iggy: I have the timing down right, but I wasn't sure about the current year. I believe it is 1458 now? If not let me know so maybe I can change the title of the post.
In fact Rachel could only count about 4 other than herself who understood the truth. Kate had asked Rachel to let Ryan and Simon know just within the past week. Only two had known for longer, and they were sworn to secrecy for the duration; a midwife and a doctor who had been part of the secret since just after the war.
So when screams were heard coming from Kates housing early one April morning, a number of the men came running to find out who was hurt. Most of the women came to confirm what they heard in those screams. Kate was birthing a child.
This of course began a new round of gossip about who the father was. When no one claimed responsibility, everyone came to the only conclusion that made sense. The father had died during the war, and Rachel was now an aunt.
Rachel quietly confirmed to some at the door that Johnathan was the father of the child before letting them know that a boy had been born. Johnathan Walters Aylor would be the childs name; it came from the fathers name and family name with Kates family name.
This was one of many births to occur within the weeks preceding and after. Many who had fought in that battle were now fathers, albeit not all were still there to see their children.
These weeks were bittersweet to all involved, new life that only helped remind everyone of their losses. Yet it provided hope, it gave many something to live for and work for, a future for their children where life might be a little better.
As for Kate, she wanted only the best for Johnathan. She had many thoughts rushing through her head, and would soon be up and working on projects. For now though, she had to rest, giving birth was much harder on the body than building an airship.
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@ Iggy: I have the timing down right, but I wasn't sure about the current year. I believe it is 1458 now? If not let me know so maybe I can change the title of the post.
flyingchicken
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Which of my stories made little sense to you, sp1023? The long one or the short one? I will address everything you need or want to know; just PM me.
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