stEspIINES - Realised Dreams

well i did it this way so i can see it on one screen easier :) the rest of the world is either empty sea - or they may be more land. I havent decided. depends upon whether another landmass would be useful. Or maybe the world is flat?
 
Xen said:
what about all my expansion- none o fmy new cities were made(including thos ementioned in the update)- anychance of a revized map?

apologies, they were meant to be n there but i wrote your part of the update at a diffeent time from doing the map...revised map is up. (does that look OK Xen?)


All: any othermistakes, please feel free, though sometimes i might have meant not to give you those hundred cities half way around the world that you asked for
 
looks fine to me Espirito- now I can get started on my story, and map :)
 
Amenhotep7 said:
To Barbarian Tribes

We hear that you tried to send messengers, but none made it. (Local villagers told me). What do you make of this comet? The High Druidic Council took this as a good omen, the beginning of a great Alesian golden age.
My diplo...
 
Espírito said:
All: any othermistakes, please feel free, though sometimes i might have meant not to give you those hundred cities half way around the world that you asked for

Whatabout my 50,000 paratroopers who were attacking Alesia this turn? :(

:p
 
First of several stories. Tell me if it's any good...:



13 KS

“Sarni sa van vo tsali zehrun Kiarnu tarnij khonaj, sa Kuzani sarnukh khetano, sa Kuzani jitourz no kiall; tzoukh khu Tourijan ehrun var varij. Tzo sarni khani zehrun tsalij no sa van vo. Tzo sarni khani tak Aluji khuall. Tzo sarni khani varij ggour jikhali, tsouj tzo khetari tsik varij khetari khonaj.”

*********

The Kuzani Farsi Sojini scanned the scroll, a thick, heavy chunk of flexible bark from the pah. Squinting at the signs, he muttered to himself. He had barely learned his letters, they were so new when he had been born. And he was still learning today. Not that anyone else was further along than he.

“When the fast light travels across the sky once again, a great King will be born, the King greatest of all; he will lead Tourijan to its true place in the sun. He will be marked by the passing of the fast light. He will be marked by Seal of Aluji breaking. He will be marked by the sun disappearing behind a great curtain of blackness, whereupon he will emerge and the sun come out again...”

He read aloud the passage to the entirety of the people in the throne room. An awkward silence fell on the court.

“Messenger. Who was this... that made this...”

He was hesitant to say it. A prophecy? To officially recognize it as such would put the Rationalists in a great stir, and he needed their support.

“Who wrote this?” he settled on.

The messenger answered without hesitation. “Kuriji Ayajo of Aluji.”

“Did he?”

“Yes.”

“Has he made any other prophecies of this nature?” the Kuzani asked, scrutinizing the young man.

“Yes, sir. Quite a few, or so I hear.”

Can’t leave a madman hanging around in a town like that, saying things that should not be said to people who should not hear them. Much better to keep him in Tourijan proper, where he can be watched. And censored. The Kuzani smiled. “Messenger, I want you to go back to Aluji, and find this man. Summon him to my court.”

“Yes sir!”

The messenger ran out.

The king muttered to himself. “Jufith!” he cussed, as the Rationalist leader walked up. He already knew what was going to be said.

“My liege, aren’t you recognizing the realm of prophecies and mysticism by summoning him here?”

“No,” he answered flatly.

“What is it then?”

“If he is out there, the peasantry might hear him...” The Kuzani gave a throat clearing cough... “And we all know how harmful that would be to him, what with the treatment that some people give prophets.”

The Relgionist leader immediately stood. “You are merely brining him here to censor him! You are a traitor to your religion! You block those who the Gods speak through!”

“Silence!” the Kuzani thundered.

“No. I have a right to speak my mind.”

“Not when I have ordered you to discontinue!” the Kuzani raged.

“I have as much right to speak freely in this palace as you do. The Jifulani built this palace for you.”

“The Jifulani happens to favor me.”

“Only because the Rationalists have a slim majority,” the leader said in a searing tone.

“I will not stand for this insolence! I have supreme authority in this land, and you do not!”

“You do not have SUPREME authority-”

“I’ve had enough of your insolence! Guards, take him away! Send for messengers, and announce that the Religionist party is hereby abolished. Its assets are to be seized, and the party leader executed!”

Alarmed, the Rationalist backed away. “Sir, isn’t this a little”

“Not you too!” the Kuzani howled.

“No, sir. I was merely commenting on the extremism of it, and the abruptness of it.”

“My word rules this land.”

“But-”

“I rule this land.”

********************************

“Var macawukh. Sa gejukh raj Sojini Kuzanii kurajukh Tourijan jo ji sarn. Yaluk tzarn’ gejukh raj kuraj Tourijan, tzarn’ yali sourz khalul kiaj sull tzarn etari tzarn raj Kuzani...”

~Excerpt from a local contemporary history of the Great Revolution.

Translation:

“It was frightening. The old and proper Sojini dynasty had ruled Tourijan for a long time. Despite their ancestral right to rule Tourijan, their draconian actions against the people made them wonder if they were a fit ruler...”

To be continued...
 
A conlanger is someone who invents languages. "Conlang" is short for "constructed language" and people who make them are known as conlangers.
 
Yah, I'm making this one up. Has its own alphabet, which I haven't revealed yet, I've gotten a few words down, and it had a nice ring to it. Very rythmic, so it's going to be THE language for singing in. ;) It's also rather more efficient than English, because it loses a lot of the conjunctives.
 
Cool, I'm a bit of a conlanger myself. *gets back to writing transcripts in Khaumas* What is it called? Tourijani?
 
I never thought about it... I guess I ought to make up a word for the language. :)

In case anyone's curious, here's the current words that I have figured out:


Spoiler Dictionary :
Letters: k, kh, h, l, j, g, s, z, n, m, f, p+b, gg, r, t+d, v, w, a^, u^, i^, e^, a, o, e.
Tenses (all suffixes): ij: Present, ukh: Past, i: future.

Aluji - Tallest mountain in Tourijan, and probably the world. Estimated height is approximately 31,000 feet. Also the name of the nearby town and lake, all three are holy sites in the Tourijan religion.
Balli - Fruit.
Etari - Curiousity, wonderment.
Fini - Ice, Icy.
Fulani - Governmental voting group, meeting place.
Gejuk - Old
Ggour - Dissapear.
Ggourij - God of Earth. Some connotations with Evil and Filth.
Ehrun - Forward.
iji - ~.87 miles, or 2000 Ji.
Jetan - Cove.
Ji - Basic Tourijan measure of length. Approximately equal to 2 feet 5 inches.
Ji (2) - Large.
Jifulani - Parliament in Tourijan.
Jisorrato - Year
Jo - Very.
Jufith - Solid Excrement, used as a expletive or profane emphasis.
Kggourji - Tubers.
Khan - Mark.
Khali - Veil, curtain.
Khalukh - Enemy
Khalul - Against
Khej - New
Khenimi - Cult worshiping Khenmi as the true path to light.
Khenmi - Goddess of the Sea and Life. Generally associated with that which is good.
Khetano - given life
Khetari - emerge
khosi - Grain.
Khonaj - Again.
Khu - lead
Khuall - Seal.
Khuraj - Rule
Khuzan - King, leader, etc.
Kali - The Veil which separates life from death, day from night, good form evil.
Ki - Sacred
Kiall - All, everything.
Kiaj - People, generally those of Tourijan.
Kiarnu - Heaven in Tallijani beliefs.
Kifini - Icy Sea
Kik - Nuts.
kiriji - Red, iridescent bird with a wingspan of over 10 feet. Associated with both Khenmi and Varij.
Kuzani - King of Tourijan
Macaw - Frightening.
No - Of.
Pa - Tree with a thick, heavy bark that is very flexible and soft. Also refers to the bark itself, and the writing material that the bark is made into.
Raj - Proper.
Sa - The, a.
Sarn - Time.
Sarni - When/will be.
Sarnij - Now
Sarnukh - Then.
So - Is/am/are
Sorra - Day
Sourz - Actions, generally negative.
Sull - Forced, made
Tak - break.
Tallijani - Religion of Tourijan, focused on purity of spirit and the Trinity of Gods.
Tarnij - Once.
Tourijan - Nation in the Southern Hemisphere.
touron - Meeting place, amphitheater.
Tourz - Achievements, accomplishments.
Tsali - Will travel, To travel.
Tsalij - Traveling.
Tsalukh - Was traveling.
Tsikh - and.
Tsouj - After.
Tzarn - Them.
Tzo - S(He).
Var - Truth.
Varij - God of Light and Fire. Generally considered pure, fair, and altogether neutral in the struggle of Good versus Evil. Creator in some cults.
Varjiliti - Cult worshipping Varij as a nearly Monotheistic deity.
Varjiliti - Fierce Warriors who fight for purity of essence.
Van - Fast.
Visij - Leader of the Jifulani.
Vo - Light.
Yali - draconian, brutal
Yalukh - Despite
Yaro - Despot
Zee - Us.
Zeh - I.
Zo - You.
Zehrun - Across.


As you can tell I haven't done much beyond what was required for the prophecies yet... ;)
 
The script had existed for a while. It had been invented by Uanauviv II himself a century ago to record Khaumas, the language of Khaumasu. Actually, only a version to write the standard Sonai dialect of the capital city Izhashov had been developed, but others would come later. So, even though this script had existed for a while, Kuataim had a hard time remembering the letters as he stood in front of the Holy Rock, carving an inscription into it with a sharp piece of stone. The Council of Wise Men stood before him, watching.
"Ah, now I remember," he said suddenly, and finished the inscription. He stepped back and observed his work. It read:
"Skaudek! Ashumeb beda Mezetuasaud suadak obali da! Ashusira beda Khuzamuadim suadak Khaumasu tuamali!"
In case you're wondering what that means in English, this is the translation:
"Hail! The holy rock of Uasau Cave glows tonight! Khuzamua fixes his holy gaze on Khaumasu tonight!"
The wise men nodded.
"Excellent work, your majesty. We couldn't have done it better ourselves," said one.
Kuataim nodded in thanks and said, "We need to start teaching this script to the general populace, it could be very useful in the future..."
 
OOC: Espirito - I hope you like it how I took an original turn regarding prophets...

IC:

"Cursed be the prophets, for they infect the Faithful with fatalism." - attrib. to Drehagan

- Prophets we:
- Disgard.
- Despise.
- Depose.

- Fate ours:
- Is forged by ourselves.
- Is Achieved by us.
- Is not predetermined.

- Prophesies:
- Decrease the resolve of those predicted to be victorious.
- Destroy the bravery of those predicted to be defeated.
- Annihilates the spirit and the mind.

---

"And so the Sage deposed Prophet-Miridran, and returned his blood to Aramon.

And thusly the Sage declared - "Otehal binds his followers to unchanging fate; Telehan grants his followers a destiny. Aramon sets us free to forge our own destiny. Nobody's fate is predetermined as long as one does not believe in his fate. Fatalism denies True Achievement.""
- Excerpts from the Red Book.

OOC Again: Did you update the stats yet?
 
Aluji - Tallest mountain in Tourijan, and probably the world. Estimated height is approximately 31,000 feet. Also the name of the nearby town and lake, all three are holy sites in the Tourijan religion.
Balli - Fruit.
Etari - Curiousity, wonderment.
Fini - Ice, Icy.
Fulani - Governmental voting group, meeting place.
Gejuk - Old
Ggour - Dissapear.
Ggourij - God of Earth. Some connotations with Evil and Filth.
Ehrun - Forward.
iji - ~.87 miles, or 2000 Ji.
Jetan - Cove.
Ji - Basic Tourijan measure of length. Approximately equal to 2 feet 5 inches.
Ji (2) - Large.
Jifulani - Parliament in Tourijan.
Jisorrato - Year
Jo - Very.
Jufith - Solid Excrement, used as a expletive or profane emphasis.
Kggourji - Tubers.
Khan - Mark.
Khali - Veil, curtain.
Khalukh - Enemy
Khalul - Against
Khej - New
Khenimi - Cult worshiping Khenmi as the true path to light.
Khenmi - Goddess of the Sea and Life. Generally associated with that which is good.
Khetano - given life
Khetari - emerge
khosi - Grain.
Khonaj - Again.
Khu - lead
Khuall - Seal.
Khuraj - Rule
Khuzan - King, leader, etc.
Kali - The Veil which separates life from death, day from night, good form evil.
Ki - Sacred
Kiall - All, everything.
Kiaj - People, generally those of Tourijan.
Kiarnu - Heaven in Tallijani beliefs.
Kifini - Icy Sea
Kik - Nuts.
kiriji - Red, iridescent bird with a wingspan of over 10 feet. Associated with both Khenmi and Varij.
Kuzani - King of Tourijan
Macaw - Frightening.
No - Of.
Pa - Tree with a thick, heavy bark that is very flexible and soft. Also refers to the bark itself, and the writing material that the bark is made into.
Raj - Proper.
Sa - The, a.
Sarn - Time.
Sarni - When/will be.
Sarnij - Now
Sarnukh - Then.
So - Is/am/are
Sorra - Day
Sourz - Actions, generally negative.
Sull - Forced, made
Tak - break.
Tallijani - Religion of Tourijan, focused on purity of spirit and the Trinity of Gods.
Tarnij - Once.
Tourijan - Nation in the Southern Hemisphere.
touron - Meeting place, amphitheater.
Tourz - Achievements, accomplishments.
Tsali - Will travel, To travel.
Tsalij - Traveling.
Tsalukh - Was traveling.
Tsikh - and.
Tsouj - After.
Tzarn - Them.
Tzo - S(He).
Var - Truth.
Varij - God of Light and Fire. Generally considered pure, fair, and altogether neutral in the struggle of Good versus Evil. Creator in some cults.
Varjiliti - Cult worshipping Varij as a nearly Monotheistic deity.
Varjiliti - Fierce Warriors who fight for purity of essence.
Van - Fast.
Visij - Leader of the Jifulani.
Vo - Light.
Yali - draconian, brutal
Yalukh - Despite
Yaro - Despot
Zee - Us.
Zeh - I.
Zo - You.
Zehrun - Across.

Reminds me of the "Taludrian dictionary" I had during the stEspINES.
 
lol u didnt have to write it all out again das just to quote :p no stats arent updated yet, i went to watch mary Poppins yesterday ¬_¬ so will do them later after TV time.

i like when people make up languages

Amen I havent forgot your diplo. I will do it when I update stats too.

Next update will probably be the next Sunday so we get back on weekends instead of mid-week which is easier, but the earlier you give me orders, i can start some before the weekend hopefully. ta. continue with the great stories and conlangs :)
 
I don't mind making a language, but I am more interested in creating an evolving culture this time (thats right. Depending on what happens to us we might get less anti-social towards the rest of the world... or, more likely, we will become even eviler and add in ritual cannibalism ;) ).
 
I do hope you stay evil, I had never even considered that possibility and I'd like to see your armies marching to war all over the place and verything evil being done.

OTOH Im sure everything will be great.
 
Oh, don't worry. We will remain evil unless we get a very very very very very good reason to become good.

Which we won't get.

So my point is, I want my culture to develop rather then stagnate at status quo, and develop realistically. That's my main plan in this NES: to roleplay an evil blood cult empire bent on world conquest. Perhaps I'll have it fall apart into warring states one day. Perhaps not.
 
****************************

“Tzo bej van vo, jig Kuzaniij, tzo takij sa gejukh Kuzanii no Sojini. Tzo sajij sa khej Kuzanii, sa Kuzanii no jo ji tourz. Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

That prophecy can never come true. Never. I will not let it come true. Even if Tourijan must be destroyed. It cannot come true, it cannot...

“The prophet has been brought in, sir.”

The Kuzani shuddered to life. Blinking his eyes several times, he looked wildly around the room.

“Bring him in,” he said. His voice sounded distant, and garbled. He dug a finger into his head, and the world spun. Shaking his head, he straightened his back, dusted off his robes, and cleared his throat.

“Here he is, sir.”

The prophet looked nothing like what Farsi Sojini had expected. He had expected some kind of wizened old graybeard, but this man was young. Couldn’t be past his teens, he thought dimly. Not shaven, but that was to be expected, especially after they had hauled him in from Aluji.

“You are Kuriji Ayajo of Aluji,” he said.

“The same,” the prophet said, standing straight and looking right into his eyes. His voice bore a sneering arrogance.

“Dare you speak to me like that?” the Kuzani said, scowling.

“I do.”

“You’re very tone carries defiance,” the Kuzani said, now simmering with rage.

“I bow for no man. I kneel for no man.”

Now positively growling, the Kuzani gestured to one of the guards. A gloved hand smashed across the prophet’s face.

“Speak with respect!” the guard barked.

“Kneel before your king,” The Kuzani said, regally calm. The prophet seemed to literally be chewing on something. “NOW!”

The prophet stepped forward, as if to kneel. But instead of falling to one knee, he opened his mouth and spat in the king’s face. Bloody, snotty saliva splashed into his face, into his eye.

“YOU!” the Kuzani shouted, furious. He wiped the spit off, but he couldn’t see out of his right eye anymore. “Take him to the dungeons!”

The guards immediately seized the prophet by the shoulders. “And inform the public that there will be a burning of a heretic tomorrow.”

Momentary surprise flashed across the man’s face, replaced immediately with grim determination. Not even a hint of fear. The Kuzani respected the man even as he hated him. He nodded to the guards, and they hauled the prophet off, still staring at the Kuzani with a searingly calm gaze.

He blinked his right eye several times, but it refused to see again. What had that man done? Had he been cursed by the gods?

**********************

The strangely shaped, multiple branched stake stood in front of the royal palace, right under the balcony that the Kuzani could watch from. Even as he stepped out onto this promontory, the proceedings began. A great fanfare of the long, slightly curved tulila blared to announce his arrival. He smiled a savage grin.

“Bring forth the prisoner!”

In chains and rags for clothes, they dragged for the prophet.

“I charge you for heresy, and spreading false lies and slander of the crown! What answer you?”

The man looked calm, and opened his mouth.

“I spoke only as I saw. I talked only as the gods instructed me to talk.”

“THE GODS DID NOT TELL YOU WHAT TO SPEAK!” the Kuzani thundered.

“They did. And I will speak as they speak.”

“Silence, infidel!” he roared. “As a clear enemy of the state, I order his execution! Guards, tie him to the post!”

The crowd fell silent in eager anticipation. The stake had four prongs in an X shape extending from it. The guards tied his hands to the upper two and his legs to the lower two. He was now hanging from the post, unable to move. Hanging by his arms and legs.

The prophet’s face grew red. But he did not try to act against the weight. He didn’t scramble to compensate. Instead, he opened his mouth, and began to sing.

“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

From the first word he knew it was horribly, horribly wrong.

“Begin!” he roared to the guards. Methodically, they picked up their bows. The singing droned on. It seemed more a chant than a song. A dark chant.

“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

“NO! GUARDS! KILL HIM!”

The guards drew arrows from their quivers and set them to the bowstring. The chanting went on. The condemned face was getting redder from the exertion.

“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

The guards drew back the bowstrings, and took aim...


“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

They released. In a moment, four arrows flew towards the prophet and slammed home with a meaty thunk. A piercing scream issued from the prophet as his flesh was torn wide open. Arrows were in the palms of his hands and the ankles of his feet, driving into the wooden stake. Blood poured from the wounds, astonishingly red. The prophet regained composure, and began to chant again.

“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

The guards took second arrows, drew back, and released. Another scream issued from the condemned. His shins and lower forearms were driven through. Blood poured more profusely. The prophet said in his last breaths.

“Khetano sarni varij ggour Kali. Khetano tak sa Sojini...”

The guards fired again, into his shoulders and thighs. The condemned’s face was purple. He shouted out his last words:

“Now we see for whom the Kiriji calls!”


**********************

Two more sections to go.
 
Back
Top Bottom