Sarin
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Few years ago, after a bit of inspiration grew into an idea, I wrote a very short story, just to see if I can. While I hope it'll be entertaining for you, I'm looking for a bit of feedback. What you liked about it and dislike, what should I improve. Personally, looking at it now I'm not happy with the ending...the way I wrote just feels a bit off to me. And maybe I should have let the banter run for a few more lines before that, when I was writing it I felt it had run its course and it was time to end it.
Anyway, enjoy and let me know what you honestly think of it.
Anyway, enjoy and let me know what you honestly think of it.