Princes of the Universe, Part I

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GREAT UPDATE Sis!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hope you get a new disc soon!!:D :D
 
I just wanted to say that this thread is one of the reasons for me moving from lurker status to registered member of these forums, simply to say:

Excellent work, sir (or Sis, if you prefer)! I hope to see more to come once your technical difficulties are resolved, but as has been stated by many (and surely many more to come), your tale is both intricate and captivating. Kudos!
 
Same here, my primary aim in registering was to say thanks.
I sincerely hope you can solve your problem, because I'd loathe not to see the conclusion of this awesome story.
Nevertheless I wish you a happy new year.
 
Hmm. That is a problem; How about this:
Make this into a cliffhanger. Then, go into BTS, start PotU, Part 2, where the Romans look back into the past, with stories by Scipio's descendants about how
"The spy gave him information, which he rushed to the General; but it was too late-The Greeks had already regrouped and joined the Mongolian offensive..."; Same Civs, but have the Japanese join the Romans, the Spaniards and Aztecs together, or something to that effect. Augustu Caesar, leader of Rome, and Grandnephew of Julius Caesar, will lead the Romans back into the books of history as a people of honor and power, all while discovering what truly happened to destroy the world as they knew it...
 
Theoretically, he could claim that what caused the many tribes to return to the Stone Age also changed the global landscape (play on an arid map or something) OR plate tectonics did it..
 
The only problem with that would be the map would be completely different. I agree he should upgrade though. BTS adds so much...

Agreed, but I'm not playing out the game for strategy/game feature illustration here, unlike the ALCs. I'm telling stories. And I want to finish this one.

I e-mailed Firaxis support. If they can't help, I'll just purchase a used copy of the game via Amazon or eBay. After all, I'd like to be able to reinstall it if the need arises.

I'll see if I can't dig up a few suitable existing screenies for the next part of the current story, though.
 
Maybe you could post without screenshots in the mean time. I know you probably want it to look just as you picture it (and that is with screenies) but that may be a temporary fix. You still wont be able to go past whatever you have already written and, well you'll still need that precious cd because it should be an item of worship to every one here but might give us all a bone to chew on.

Or we could all just wait and see.
 
Princes 15 - Scipio's Spy

Part 2

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A great oak door opened, and a heavy-set man in a dark blue coat with gold buttons and clean white breeches walked out. The sword hanging from his left hip indicated he was an officer, the red sash around his waist—not to mention his presence in the general’s chambers—meant he was a high-ranking one. Scipio quickly spied the two silver epaulets on the man’s shoulders and then knew the man held the rank of Major. He had short brown hair and a long, drooping mustache, and the way he eyed Scipio reminded the rifleman of how a cat sized up a mouse in the dark, dirty alleyways back home.

“Lieutenant Scipio?” the man said, and Scipio was on his feet at full attention in an instant.

“Sir!” he said, staring at a spot on the wall just above the Major’s head.

“At ease, Lieutenant,” the Major said.

The right side of man’s mouth twitched upward for a moment, indicating he found Scipio’s adherence to rigid army formality—which only served to advertise his anxiety—mildly amusing. Bastard, Scipio thought as he relaxed his stance as much as his body let him.

“Follow me,” the Major said.

A good soldier, Scipio did as he was told. He followed the Major into a large chamber, still decorated in simple Mongolian style and native woods, but now sporting some Roman additions, such as several large flags, all bearing a gold oak crown on a field of purple, the standard of Rome. At the far end of the room, two golden eagles atop oak staffs stood on either side of a large desk; behind the desk, on the wall, was a portrait of a man wearing the purple-striped toga of a senator, a patch over one eye, and, more significantly, a grass crown upon his head. At the desk sat a man with auburn hair speckled with grey that formed short, tight curls upon his head. He was dressed in a blue coat with gold epaulets, and was studying several papers in front of him.

Scipio followed the Major to the front of the desk, where the officer cleared his throat to get the General’s attention. The man at the desk looked up, then gently laid the sheet of paper he’d been studying upon his desk and slowly rose to his feet.

“General Gaius Rutullus Lepidus,” the Major said, “may I present Lieutenant Marcus Scipio.”

“Sir!” Scipio said, assuming a stance of full attention yet again.

“At ease, at ease,” the General said with a wave of his hand. He strode casually from behind his desk until he was standing in front of it and staring hard at Scipio, who did his best to stand steady before that intense, unwavering gaze.

“Tell me what she said,” the General ordered without preamble. “Verbatim, Lieutenant. Every word, exactly.”

Scipio repeated his message, fully aware of the General’s intense gaze that seemed capable of seeing clear through into the depths of his soul. Though the message meant nothing to him, he was aware that it was code and could have deep meaning for these two men, and therefore for the war. Scipio also assumed that the lovely young Mongolian woman who called herself Larentia had very likely risked her life to deliver the message to him.

When he finished, the General turned to Major Scaurus. The two senior officers shared a long, silent look that nevertheless seemed to convey a great deal of unspoken information. Then the General turned from Scipio and walked back behind his desk, his face pensive.

“Thank you, Lieutenant,” Scaurus said brightly, with a feigned friendliness that made Scipio all too aware that he was about to be dismissed. “That will be…”

“There’s more, sir,” Scipio said.

“More?” Scaurus said, his expression suddenly suspicious. “You did give us the entire message, didn’t you, Lieutenant?” he asked, his tone implying that there would be trouble for Scipio if he was holding out on them for some reason.

“Yes sir, every word,” Scipio replied. “But after she gave me the message, the woman was captured, sir. By a bunch of Mongos… sorry, Mongolians. They were… treating her quite rough, sir.”

A long, heavy silence hung in the room. Scipio watched as the Major and General shared yet another silent but significant communicative glance.

“Unfortunate,” the General said with a sigh, his lips pressed together grimly. “She’s been very useful to us.”

“Indeed she has, sir.” Scaurus said.

Every sensible instinct he possessed told Scipio to keep his mouth shut. He knew that the best thing he could do would be to deliver a smart salute and then beat a hasty retreat. But some other part of him wouldn’t let it go. He was all too familiar with that part of himself; it was the very reason he was in uniform fighting in Mongolia rather than relaxing in a tavern on the other side of the world. He could no more deny it than he could stop breathing.

“Sirs,” he said, and felt a cold sweat break out on his skin as the two senior officers suddenly focused their attention on him. They both looked somewhat appalled that he even had the temerity to speak up, but Scipio ploughed ahead. “Surely she must still be in the city somewhere. Some sort of… rescue operation can’t be out of the question, can it?”

The Major and the General were silent for a moment. Then Major Scaurus began to chuckle, a low, mocking laugh that made the blood rise to Scipio’s cheeks.

“Rescue?” Scaurus said. “Oh, you are a gallant one, aren’t you, Lieutenant?”

“She’s obviously been acting as a Roman agent, sir,” Scipio continued, though the sensible part of his brain was silently screaming at him to stop. “Surely we owe her…”

“That is quite enough, Lieutenant,” the General said testily. “I don’t need to be lectured about quid pro quo with our agents by my junior officers.”

Scipio’s teeth gnashed together and he stared long and hard at his general, long enough to be considered insubordinate. Just as Lepidus’ brows rose, Scipio lifted his gaze to a spot on the wall above the General’s head and brought himself to attention.

“Sir!” he said, checking the anger he felt.

Lepidus sighed heavily and rose from behind his desk. “In war,” he said to Scipio in a tone that was surprisingly gentle, “sacrifices must be made. If you try to keep everyone from getting killed, you wind up getting them all killed. Perhaps if you rise higher in the ranks you’ll come to understand that, Lieutenant.”

“Sir,” Scipio said, his anger at the General’s seeming callousness dissipating. Even so, the abandonment of the woman continued to bother him.

Lepidus turned and marched back to his desk, nodding at Scaurus as he did so.

The Major simply turned to Scipio and said, “Dismissed, Lieutenant.”
 
Pretty nice update you've got here. If I were to give you advice, I'd say to just start trying to publish some of your best works.

Just wondering, though, why the parts don't have their own specific names to them. Like in previous chapters with multiple parts, each part had its own distinguishable name. Nothing major, anyway.

Is "Scipio's Spy" going to cover the entire Mongolian war, part of it, or more?
 
Just wondering, though, why the parts don't have their own specific names to them. Like in previous chapters with multiple parts, each part had its own distinguishable name. Nothing major, anyway.

Is "Scipio's Spy" going to cover the entire Mongolian war, part of it, or more?
I just couldn't think of any chapter titles this time around, so I didn't bother.

This story will probably just cover part of the war. I haven't decided on whether I want to deal with the rest of the war in a series of lengthy stories (which would feature Scipio, mostly) or if I just want to cut to the chase. Still gotta get to Alex after this, y'know. I guess I'll see how I feel when I get this one done and what the feedback is like.
 
Some good news on the disc front: Take 2 Interactive will replace damaged discs. You just need to send them the disc with a cover letter and a cheque for US $7.50 (which, with the current Yankee Peso exchange rate, is now about $1.25 Canadian or something :lol:). So I should be able to get vanilla back up and running for more screenshots in a little while.
 
Good news indeed, and thanks for the small update.
One thing I'd love to read, is a Roman being captured by the Greeks, and as he's brought to the gallows he stares at the silent crowd and shouts "I AM A ROMAN CITIZEN !"
I'm sure you'll even do better than Thomas Harris.
Keep up the good work.
 
Great update, Sisiutil!

Your chapters are awfully short though. But I guess that's part of the charm. We, your readers, end up truly wanting more each time you post.

Also glad you've sorted out your disc problem. Looking forward to the next chapter!
 
Some good news on the disc front: Take 2 Interactive will replace damaged discs. You just need to send them the disc with a cover letter and a cheque for US $7.50 (which, with the current Yankee Peso exchange rate, is now about $1.25 Canadian or something :lol:). So I should be able to get vanilla back up and running for more screenshots in a little while.

Yeah, our economy is going dowhill:crazyeye: . You don't have to laugh at it though, it's not the economy's fault it's going downhill;) .
 
Nice update....
So,. how's the Mongolian Campaign going on? I suggest you end it quick before LIz is overrun by the Greeks (they are involved, aren;'t they?!)
 
I actually think Sisiutil has already finished the game and is just writing about it. :thumbsup: So, I think the Greeks have been dealt with. I'm just curious as to how Caesar is going to deal with Elizabeth. :)
 
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