Princes of the Universe, Part I

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another incredible update. Damn it sisutil, couldnt you have mad this usurper a beast of a man so that those of us reading could hate him thuroughly!! lol... lets hope our mini-protagonist gets some of those things he is going for in life before the end of his voyage.


keep it up man.
 
another incredible update. Damn it sisutil, couldnt you have mad this usurper a beast of a man so that those of us reading could hate him thuroughly!! lol... lets hope our mini-protagonist gets some of those things he is going for in life before the end of his voyage.


keep it up man.

:lol: Oftentimes an inner conflict is more interesting than an external one. If I'd wanted Lucius' rival to be a mustache-twirling villain, I would have married Claudia off to Cinna. :eek: Making him a decent person instead makes things more difficult for our protagonist--and for the reader. I mean, you all want Lucius to end up with Claudia, but you also want him to do the right thing, and those two goals have now become irreconcilable. Writers are sadists, you see; they take nice people (including their readers) and put them through hell. :evil: :lol:

Lucius' story has six more installments to go. Assuming I don't get inspired to insert another chapter after I thought the story was done, which has happened three times already! :rolleyes:
 
when are you going to post the next installment? :confused: :)
 
when are you going to post the next installment? :confused: :)

My, but you're an insatiable lot! :lol: The next installment will appear in a day or two. It's nice to be able to post them this quickly, as opposed to the update-every-month-or-two I was doing for a while!
 
Really only six more chapters? The Aztecs are still alive, the other continent is untouched, and you still haven't resolved the Lucius sub plot. Are you planning on merging the next few conflicts into one and spending another chapter on Lucius? :confused:
 
oh :D i'm sorry sisiutil for asking too much. I just found this story couple of days ago, so i read this story nonstop without waiting. now i have to wait to read the next update, that's why i sounded too impatient.

PS when i saw your name in "last post by" just now i thought you posted the update :lol:
 
Really only six more chapters? The Aztecs are still alive, the other continent is untouched, and you still haven't resolved the Lucius sub plot. Are you planning on merging the next few conflicts into one and spending another chapter on Lucius? :confused:
I said that Lucius' story has six more installments to go. The story of Rome has several more than that, I assure you! ;) As you aptly pointed out, Caesar's work is far from done.
oh :D i'm sorry sisiutil for asking too much. I just found this story couple of days ago, so i read this story nonstop without waiting. now i have to wait to read the next update, that's why i sounded too impatient.

PS when i saw your name in "last post by" just now i thought you posted the update :lol:
No apology necessary; eagerness for the next installment is the highest of compliments.

I was afraid that these response posts might be a let-down for those expecting the next chapter, but I like to respond to feedback as much as I can.
 
Oh I probably should learn how to read then. :blush:
I'm glad theres still a lot left I want to read all the details in Caesar's final great victory. :D
 
:lol: I mean, you all want Lucius to end up with Claudia, but you also want him to do the right thing, and those two goals have now become irreconcilable. Writers are sadists, you see; they take nice people (including their readers) and put them through hell. :evil: :lol:

Lucky for me I'm a complete scoundrel and have no qualms about doing the right thing...... :lol:
 
Sisiutil, I just want to thank you. These segments are the perfect length for me to read. I dont get much free time from my daughter so these are welcomed breaks. Id love to actually sit down and read a book (besides homework) but until she gets older your story's are a great distraction. Hopefully you'll be writing these until shes 8-9'ish (4-5 more years). Keep up the great work!
 
So are your chapters pre-written, is that why you can post them more often now?
 
Sisiutil, I just want to thank you. These segments are the perfect length for me to read. I dont get much free time from my daughter so these are welcomed breaks. Id love to actually sit down and read a book (besides homework) but until she gets older your story's are a great distraction. Hopefully you'll be writing these until shes 8-9'ish (4-5 more years). Keep up the great work!
By then I hope you'll be buying my books from Amazon. :D And reading them to her at bedtime. Okay, maybe not; by the time she's old enough for stories like these she'll be too old for bedtime reading! :lol:
So are your chapters pre-written, is that why you can post them more often now?

I think he at least has the outline of the story. He knows where he's going with it and it's all just one plot instead of several plots; parts of a chapter instead of different chapters.

The truth lies somewhere in between.

I have a plot outline for the rest of the entire PotU series and several later chapters or at least scenes written out, some of them months ago. The current story came to me recently in a flood one day and I wrote it out in much the same manner. That happens to me sometimes. However, I prefer to take my time posting both types of installments because I tend to get ideas for revisions, both minor and substantial.

For example, the first version of this latest installment had Lucius and Catullus getting all chummy right after they met. As I re-read it, that just didn't wash, hence the very different version you see above. For an example of a minor revision, when I checked the screenshots, I saw that the 14th was up against Spearmen rather than Archers and revised that paragraph accordingly.

In addition, posting this longer story slowly is allowing me to get a few chapters ahead with the following stories. So that will hopefully mean no more month-long delays between installments! And as broncoblaster notes above, getting a little at a time suits a lot of the readers quite well indeed. For me, it gives everyone a chance to leave a little feedback, which is the closest thing to payment I'll receive for this. :D (hint, hint)
 
well i think we payed you enough! now out with it, man!
 
well i think we payed you enough! now out with it, man!

Gee, since you asked so nicely... :rolleyes: ;)

... you get to wait until tomorrow night. :lol:


Seriously, though, the ALC needs some TLC. Please be patient.
 
sisiutil, u have books on amazon?

....or is my leg being seriously pulled here?

but wouldn't doubt it if you had.. writer of your calibre.
 
sisiutil, u have books on amazon?

....or is my leg being seriously pulled here?

but wouldn't doubt it if you had.. writer of your calibre.

Not yet, but I hope to one day, especially within the time frame mentioned above. Thanks for the compliment. :D

EDIT: I almost forgot to mention, though, that I have some other (non-Civ) stories posted HERE.
 
Chapter Eleven: Noble Men

Part 9 – Within the Gates of Tenochtitlan




Nearly two years of hard fighting later, the Roman army stood before the high walls of Tenochtitlan, the Aztec capital. The Roman forces were undaunted by its imposing fortifications; many of the legions had extensive expertise in city raiding now, including the Fourteenth. They’d gained additional experience fighting various battles in the open field against a variety of Aztec forces—spears, pikes, maces, horse archers—all of which had fallen to Roman steel. The Fourteenth may have begun the war as fresh-faced rookies, but the Legion now standing before the citadel of Tenochtitlan were battle-hardened veterans. And they’d never lost a fight.

“This is it,” Caesar said to his assembled army as they stood before the city gates. “The Aztec capital. Not the last city we’ll take, but after this, it’s mop-up duty. And then the entire continent will belong to Rome!” The cheers with which the Legions greeting this prospect were ecstatic, to say the least.

“Listen up, men,” Catullus said afterwards to the Fourteenth Legion—his Legion now, after leading them for two years, and their rapt attention and admiring looks confirmed it—“I want the Fourteenth to earn a new honour. I want us to be the ones who track down Montezuma and bring him in chains to Caesar! And I’ll give every man in this Legion an extra day’s pay and an extra day off if we do it!”

The legionaries roared with eagerness, and Catullus turned and favoured Lucius with a smile and a wink.

“They don’t need the added incentive, you know,” Lucius told him once the men had been dismissed. “They’d hunt down Montezuma just because you asked them to do it.”

“I know,” Catullus said with a nod. “But they’ve earned it. And I know they can do it. That’ll be quite a feather in our caps, won’t it?”

Lucius nodded, but did not smile. “I suppose, but we have a battle to fight first. I’ll have the centurions remind the men to focus on the fight and worry about Montezuma only when it’s clear that we’ve won.”

Catullus nodded his consent. “Good thinking. Always the primus pilus, eh?” he said, slapping his friend on his shoulder. “I swear, Fortunaherself placed me in your Legion, Lucius Rutullus!”

Then that old Roman goddess has a peculiar sense of irony, Lucius thought, but did not say aloud. “You still believe in the old gods?” he asked his friend.
Catullus shrugged. “It’s a figure of speech. I can’t say I ever give religion much thought.” He frowned, considering things for a moment. “I hope that doesn’t offend you. Are you religious?”

“Confucian,” Lucius answered.

“Ah, like my wife,” Catullus said, then frowned. “Strange how we’ve never talked about it before.”

“It’s not surprising,” Lucius said. “It’s sad, in a way. Every religion I know of preaches tolerance, but look at us now—fighting a war over it!” He shook his head. “It should bring people together, but instead, religion seems to set men apart. No wonder you and I haven’t discussed it.”

Silently, Lucius reflected that he and Catullus had more than enough that could come between them already, and it had been difficult for him to set that aside and befriend the man. He had not written to Claudia since that letter he sent two years ago, assuring her that he’d watch out for her husband. Any more communication with the wife of another man struck him as unseemly. He told himself that whatever he and Claudia might have once had, it was now over. And he thought that if he kept telling himself that, he might actually start to believe it one day.

“I see your point,” Catullus conceded, then smiled. “Even so, if two of the people I love and respect most in the world follow that faith, perhaps I should look into it as well.”

Lucius glanced at Catullus and grinned. “When the war’s over, I could take you to the Kong Miao in Antium. I might even be able to introduce you to Mencius.”

“The High Priest?” Catullus said, eyebrows rising. Even a non-believer such as himself kept appraised of who’s who in Rome’s state religion. “You know him?” he asked, obviously impressed.

“I only had the privilege of meeting him once,” Lucius said. “But he leaves an impression.” He paused and looked thoughtful. “Quiet, gentle wisdom.” He nodded. “Yes, that’s how I’d describe it.”

“I’d be honoured,” Catullus said, “and I know Claudia would be thrilled.”

Lucius flinched slightly in reaction to a sudden twist in his gut. He realized for the first time that when the war was over, his friendship with Catullus would require him to be in Claudia’s presence from time to time. How on earth was he going to manage that? It was one thing to resign himself to Claudia’s marriage as an abstract concept; how was he going to feel when he saw them together? I’ll just have to soldier on through it, the legionary told himself.

***

The next day, like a great synchronized machine, the Roman army went to work, bent on the task of prying open the Aztec capital. The catapults stripped the city of its defences, opening multiple breaches in the walls, then showering the city defenders with missiles to weaken them. After that, as usual, it was the task of the Legions to finish off the city garrisons.

The Fourteenth Legion marched, wary and watchful, through a southern breach in the walls. Like all city garrisons they had encountered, those of the capital would be dug in; they’d know every street, every alley, every house, every nook and cranny where they could hide and fire their arrows and ambush the invaders of their city. Conversely, the city raiders had to stay in their protective formation and deal with each threat as it arose before moving on to the next. It was dangerous work, but the Fourteenth excelled at it.

Nevertheless, they were more cautious than usual. When they’d captured the minor city of Texcoco, they’d fought a garrison of archers wielding longbows. The longer bows launched arrows with greater force—capable of piercing Roman armour, even shields at close range. They’d heard that a similar garrison was defending the capital. Hence their caution.
The Legion was marching in formation, shields raised, down an Aztec street that led to the city’s central square. Suddenly, the hairs on the back of Lucius’ neck rose as if to attention, his battle instincts honed now by years of experience.

“AMBUSH!” he shouted, and the leading rank and file tightened their formation, drawing their shields closer together, and just in time; a veritable hailstorm of arrows erupted from every surrounding window, doorway, and rooftop. The arrows were apparently shot from ordinary bows, because they clattered uselessly against the broad, strong Roman shields. The Romans stood their ground, waiting for the barrage of arrows to end, for the Archers to run out of ammunition and attack with nothing more than their long daggers.

This they did a moment later, in far greater numbers than the Romans expected. The shields and gladii did their brutal work, but the Archers seemed intent on breaking through the Roman line in an attempt to break it up completely. They threw themselves at the Roman shields, angrily thrusting their daggers over top and between any gaps; they even crawled on their bellies to try to infiltrate the Roman formation from below, only to find themselves stomped down by the hard hobnails in the bottoms of the Romans’ heavy, hobnailed sandals.

The Legion was assaulted from all sides but its rear, which stretched back through the city streets to the breach where they’d entered. They knew that all they had to do was stand their ground and wait for the attackers to exhaust themselves and diminish in number as the legionaries’ short stabbing swords cut them down.

But then disaster struck. Among the attacking archers, one appeared wielding the dreaded longbow. A single ill-fated missile, launched from that powerful new bow, got through a gap the raised shields. And of all the legionaries to find and strike, that one arrow, guided as if by sheer malice, found its way to one of two men whose injury would do the Fourteenth Legion its greatest harm.



Catullus’ shout of pain and anger when the arrow struck home was heard by every man fighting in the front ranks, and they all recognized its source. His sword arm had been raised to ward off an archer’s dagger, allowing the arrow to penetrate deep into his right side, below his armpit, in the gap between the front and back of his body armour. His arm went limp and his gladius clattered to the cobblestones. The rest of his body followed it down.

“NO!!” Lucius shouted from nearby as he saw his friend and commanding officer fall. In that moment, he forgot that he was primus pilus, forgot that the men would now look to him to give them orders and shore up their courage. He was consumed with concern for his friend, and with the powerful need to live up to the promise he’d made to the woman they both loved to keep him safe.

He pushed his way through the crush of armoured bodies towards Catullus, heedless of the growing confusion and disorder that was spreading like a disease through the ranks. He sheathed his sword and reached down to his fallen friend, saw the arrow and the blood, and turned to the men around him.

“Get him out of…” Lucius ordered them, but spoke no more than that, for he was interrupted by a thundering crash that came from behind him, emanating from the front rank.

The Aztecs had somehow managed to lift a large stone to the top of one of the roofs of the buildings that lined the street, and they’d just pushed it over the edge. It had crashed down upon the front right corner of the Roman formation, killing two men instantly and injuring three more. Negligible casualties in the great scheme of things, but for a moment that stretched out far too long, it accomplished something far more terrible: it opened a hole in the Roman line, and before the stunned legionaries could react, the Aztec archers came screaming through that hole.

In an instant, the Roman’s front ranks disintegrated into hand-to-hand combat and utter chaos. The Roman heavy infantry were much more heavily armoured than their Aztec opponents, but the archers were numerous, and were fighting for their capital city and their homeland; they were ferocious, even fanatical.

“FALL BACK!” Lucius shouted. “FALL BACK AND REFORM THE LINE!”

Which is precisely what the legionaries proceeded to do, extricating themselves as best they could from their attackers and dropping back to re-establish order among their ranks. Lucius was about to join them when he realized that Catullus still lay at his feet, badly wounded. He couldn’t abandon him. Then he looked up and further realized that he and his wounded commanding officer were suddenly and utterly alone. The Legions had retreated several yards behind him, and with dozens of furious Aztec archers only a few paces away, his comrades might as well have been on the moon. The legionaries were shifting and struggling to reform themselves without his steadying presence, staring ahead, in shock, at him and the prostrate body of their leader.

Lucius turned to face the Aztecs, who paused to stare in disbelief at the amazing prospect of seeing a legion in retreat and two legionaries—both obviously leaders—ripe for the taking before them. Among them Lucius spotted the longbowman who had apparently wounded Catullus.



“You won’t touch him, you bastards!” Lucius roared at them in their native tongue. “I’ll kill every last one of you that tries!”

The Aztecs rushed him while the longbowman reached into his quiver for another arrow. Lucius’ sword hand reached to his belt, but instead of clasping his sword handle, grabbed a dagger, which he threw with deadly accuracy at the longbowman. It struck the man dead in the chest, and he staggered backwards, his formidable bow clattering uselessly to the cobblestones.

Two archers were upon Lucius; he slammed his heavy shield into them, winding them both and knocking them to the ground. Lucius then drew his gladius and steadied himself, his feet planted on either side of Catullus, his shield held before him. Two more archers reached him, daggers raised to strike; he knocked one down by ramming him with his shield, the other fell after his sword emptied the man’s bowels onto the street. More archers came at him; he chopped at the hands holding their daggers, severing several at the wrist; he struck at their guts, leaving them staggering and clutching their bellies; he butted them with his heavy shield, winding them and leaving them to be crushed beneath their comrades’ feet. One archer circled behind him, but Lucius saw him, deftly changed his grip on his sword, and stabbed backwards into the man’s stomach before he could strike. Others in the rear shot their remaining arrows at him, or resorted to hurling stones, but these clattered uselessly against his shield or armour.

“What the hell are you mentulae waiting for, a written invitation?” Gnaeus Decumius shouted at the leading ranks of the Legion as they watched Lucius in amazement while he fought alone and held his ground over his fallen friend. “FORWARD!!”

The Fourteenth Legion rushed ahead in an orderly run, yelling a blood-curdling battle-cry, and slammed into the Aztecs that now threatened to overwhelm Lucius through sheer numbers alone. Just as his fellow legionaries surged around him, an Aztec archer, his teeth bared in an angry grimace, lunged at him. The man brought his dagger down at Lucius overhand; the blade struck the top edge of his shield and shattered. Its tip ricocheted off the shield and struck Lucius in his left eye. He cried out in pain, cursing, and dropped to the ground beside his fallen comrade for a brief moment before other legionaries hauled them both up and bore them back to safety.

Minutes later, they were both in the surgeons’ tent outside the city walls. The first arrow that had struck Catullus had penetrated deep into his chest cavity. His condition was dire, and the surgeons were focused on him. A doctor had found time to remove the knife shard from Lucius’ eye, but could not save the eye itself. Lucius lay on a cot, all but forgotten, the left upper side of his face swathed with bandages which were soaked with blood. A nurse gave him a tincture of poppies for the pain. Lucius felt his face, indeed, his entire body growing pleasantly numb, but the narcotic could not quell the pain in his heart.

Some time later—how long Lucius couldn’t tell—a surgeon came over to him.
“I understand you’re a friend of the man who was brought in with you?” the surgeon, a heavy-set man with short hair going grey, said to him.

“Yes,” Lucius said, his concern forcing him from his drugged torpor. “How is he?”

“I’m sorry, son,” the surgeon said, shaking his head and patting Lucius on the shoulder. “He didn’t make it.”

Lucius pressed his lips together and nodded. The surgeon left him. A moment later, his injured face become contorted with sorrow, and tears fell from his remaining eye. Those few who saw him and noticed him assumed he was weeping for his lost friend and commanding officer, but they could not know there was more to it than that. For Lucius was wracked by guilt, convinced that despite his heroic efforts and their terrible cost, he could have done something more, or something different, that would have saved Catullus’ life.

Worse still, he felt certain that he had failed not for want of courage, but because of jealously and avarice, because he coveted his friend’s wife. The malicious spirit in his head, so long suppressed, had finally won. But as a result, Lucius was certain, he had lost her forever. He had failed to keep his promise, had failed to keep Catullus alive, and had thus failed Claudia and failed himself. The pain of losing an eye was nothing in comparison; Lucius lay on the cot in the surgeon’s tent and lost himself to the deepest and most profound misery he had ever known.

***

Tenochtitlan fell that day, but Montezuma escaped. The Fourteenth Legion was far more concerned with the fates of their two revered leaders to go chasing after a beaten foreign monarch; his capital had fallen, and his own fate was assured. Once other legionaries had relieved them in the fight to take the capital, the Fourteenth hurried to crowd outside the surgeon’s tent and await any news. The medical staff were so busy, however, that the legionaries had to wait until Lucius himself came out of the tent, well after nightfall. The Legion uttered a collective sigh of relief upon seeing him, followed by a gasp and worried murmurs when they saw the blood-soaked bandages over his left eye. Lucius staggered under the pain of his wound, the drug still in his system, and the horrible weight of his guilt, though his comrades knew nothing of the latter.

Gnaeus Decumius stepped forward. “Lucius Rutullus,” he said. “What of Quintus Lutatius?”

An expression of abject misery registered on the unruined half of Lucius’ face, and he shook his head. The men around him uttered a groan of great sorrow which only added to the guilt gnawing at Lucius’ conscience. He left them and, even though his body was still reeling from the awful wound he’d received, he returned to his tent and composed a letter, which for all its brevity was nonetheless one of the most difficult things he’d ever done in his life.
Dear Claudia,

It is with great regret that I write to inform you that your husband, Quintus Lutatius Catulus Junior, was killed in action here today within the Aztec capital of Tenochtitlan. He fought bravely and made no small contribution to our victory today. He was a most able commander and a good friend. He will be sorely missed, by the men, by Caesar, by Rome, and not least of all by myself.

I send you my deepest and most sincere condolences, and my humblest apology for failing in the task you requested of me. I was standing beside him in the ranks, only a few feet away, yet I failed to protect him. I can offer no excuse for my failure. I cannot imagine that you will ever want to hear from me or see me again, so you will not. I wish you all the best, wherever the future may take you.

Yours sincerely,

Lucius Rutullus Lepidus

And that, Lucius morosely decided, was that. He gave the letter to an attendant to be dispatched to Rome, then he returned to his tent. The narcotic was wearing off and his eye—or, more properly, his eye socket—was beginning to ache. He welcomed the pain. He felt that he deserved it. Even so, he fell asleep almost as soon as he laid his head down, and his sleep was dark and bereft of dreams.

 
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