Because of the limitations of the polling feature here, the Poetry Challenge competitors will each have their own thread. Readers are asked to vote in BOTH threads (please see the link to the other thread), once per poem, for a total of six votes per writer using the usual A-F scale in which A means you think it's really excellent and F means you think it needs a great deal of improvement.
(To read, critique, and vote for Iron Pen Berryman's poems, please follow this link.)
To recap, the writers were asked to create six poems from a list of 10 options. The ten options were:
1. Haiku
2. Limerick
3. Cinquain
4. Tanka
5. Sonnet (Shakespearean style)
6. Short verse (12-20 lines), rhymed
7. Long verse (21-60 lines), rhymed
8. Short verse (12-20 lines), free verse
9. Long verse (21-60 lines), free verse
10. Writer's choice
The rules for choosing the poems were:
1. Either a haiku or a limerick
2. Either a cinquain or a tanka
3. Sonnet
4. One short poem (rhymed or free verse)
5. One long poem (rhymed or free verse)
6. Writer's choice of any of the 10 on the list
The readers are asked to read, critique, and score these six poems for each writer. It's crucial that votes be cast for both, to ensure that the scoring is fair.
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And now I am pleased to present the poems by Iron Pen Piranha Eel:
1. Short Poem (Unrhymed)
There is a dam between us.
behind it are words left unsaid.
neither of us can break it,
so instead we part our separate ways.
Sometimes,
in the poisonous fog of silence
I wonder.
when did love not become enough?
Ever since you came back from war
your eyes have been drawn to the stars
and were falling apart.
When did I stop being home?
2. Haiku
Wear your disbelief
like armor, wield your caustic
words like theyre weapons.
It wont save you.
Before destiny,
you are an infant, naked
and shaking a stick.
3. Author's Choice
The war is over, my children tell me.
Lets watch the parade to celebrate our victory.
Not now, not ever, I cry.
Not until every speck dust goes goodbye.
Before I can give them brooms to finish the war, my children flee.
4. Cinquain
Hell
is the
quiet moments of
despair hiding in daily
life
5. Sonnet
I am an artist, perhaps you know me?
My colors are ashen gray and blood red.
I am an artist, surely you know me?
My price- not even a hair on your head.
I work on portraits of men, rich and poor
Women too, babies if duty demands.
My brushes are famine, plague and claymore
My canvas is the body of humans.
I am an artist, and you will know me.
My magnum opuses, they are grim.
Im highly despised but mandatory;
My works cause some to sing (funeral) hymns.
I am looking for a new master piece.
Would you like to rest in eternal peace?
6. Long Poem (Rhymed)
In a city so inconsequential no one knows it name
not even its residents, there is a sad sad lane
where hope comes to die.
Hastily drawn penises scrawled on the wall, flowers try
to grow through cracks in concrete
but choked by weeds. The walls are replete
with campaign posters, from a time when the political parties cared,
crumbling into ruin. The windows have not fared
much better. Some riddled with bullet holes,
others shattered completely, shards of glass gathered in pot holes.
All full of stories of violence, intimidation and fear.
Of course, there will be no investigations, the police dont even come here.
When human trash leaves the lane, the cops ride them down,
valiant knights on trusty black and white steeds to protect the town.
When the skirmish ends, sometimes the cops throw them in jail,
and sometimes, a corpse, pale
and cold is returned to the mother.
She weeps, but in the end, hes just another
tragedy from the lane, and theres already too many to count.
Drugs, gangs, disease, the police, as ways to die, theyre all tantamount.
Who cares
though, who cares?
To others, theyre scum whore born in the gutter and crawl to the streets
gun in hand, knife in teeth.
(To read, critique, and vote for Iron Pen Berryman's poems, please follow this link.)
To recap, the writers were asked to create six poems from a list of 10 options. The ten options were:
1. Haiku
2. Limerick
3. Cinquain
4. Tanka
5. Sonnet (Shakespearean style)
6. Short verse (12-20 lines), rhymed
7. Long verse (21-60 lines), rhymed
8. Short verse (12-20 lines), free verse
9. Long verse (21-60 lines), free verse
10. Writer's choice
The rules for choosing the poems were:
1. Either a haiku or a limerick
2. Either a cinquain or a tanka
3. Sonnet
4. One short poem (rhymed or free verse)
5. One long poem (rhymed or free verse)
6. Writer's choice of any of the 10 on the list
The readers are asked to read, critique, and score these six poems for each writer. It's crucial that votes be cast for both, to ensure that the scoring is fair.
~~~~~~~~~~
And now I am pleased to present the poems by Iron Pen Piranha Eel:
1. Short Poem (Unrhymed)
There is a dam between us.
behind it are words left unsaid.
neither of us can break it,
so instead we part our separate ways.
Sometimes,
in the poisonous fog of silence
I wonder.
when did love not become enough?
Ever since you came back from war
your eyes have been drawn to the stars
and were falling apart.
When did I stop being home?
2. Haiku
Wear your disbelief
like armor, wield your caustic
words like theyre weapons.
It wont save you.
Before destiny,
you are an infant, naked
and shaking a stick.
3. Author's Choice
The war is over, my children tell me.
Lets watch the parade to celebrate our victory.
Not now, not ever, I cry.
Not until every speck dust goes goodbye.
Before I can give them brooms to finish the war, my children flee.
4. Cinquain
Hell
is the
quiet moments of
despair hiding in daily
life
5. Sonnet
I am an artist, perhaps you know me?
My colors are ashen gray and blood red.
I am an artist, surely you know me?
My price- not even a hair on your head.
I work on portraits of men, rich and poor
Women too, babies if duty demands.
My brushes are famine, plague and claymore
My canvas is the body of humans.
I am an artist, and you will know me.
My magnum opuses, they are grim.
Im highly despised but mandatory;
My works cause some to sing (funeral) hymns.
I am looking for a new master piece.
Would you like to rest in eternal peace?
6. Long Poem (Rhymed)
In a city so inconsequential no one knows it name
not even its residents, there is a sad sad lane
where hope comes to die.
Hastily drawn penises scrawled on the wall, flowers try
to grow through cracks in concrete
but choked by weeds. The walls are replete
with campaign posters, from a time when the political parties cared,
crumbling into ruin. The windows have not fared
much better. Some riddled with bullet holes,
others shattered completely, shards of glass gathered in pot holes.
All full of stories of violence, intimidation and fear.
Of course, there will be no investigations, the police dont even come here.
When human trash leaves the lane, the cops ride them down,
valiant knights on trusty black and white steeds to protect the town.
When the skirmish ends, sometimes the cops throw them in jail,
and sometimes, a corpse, pale
and cold is returned to the mother.
She weeps, but in the end, hes just another
tragedy from the lane, and theres already too many to count.
Drugs, gangs, disease, the police, as ways to die, theyre all tantamount.
Who cares
though, who cares?
To others, theyre scum whore born in the gutter and crawl to the streets
gun in hand, knife in teeth.