Haiku Instead?
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Like most things... it depends. In English tradition has it as five syllables then seven then five. Traditional japanese elements include nature/season elements and a last line that is a kind of "Ah ha" moment of surprise. Many modern haiku writers ignore those tradtions.
EDIT:
I must turn over...
Beware of local earthquakes
Bedfellow cricket!
by Issa
punkbass2000
Des An artiste
Two cats croon on fences
The parrot runs counter-melody
The night does not change
The parrot runs counter-melody
The night does not change
punkbass2000
Des An artiste
In three lines one cannot ever hope to create a unique world, but only mirror something already existant in the person looking at it
Few lines used wisely
Can communicate reality
Even the moon replies
punkbass2000
Des An artiste
That is not really true
I don't imagine I'll convert
Sleep well anyway, my friend.
I don't imagine I'll convert
Sleep well anyway, my friend.
Bozo Erectus
Master Baker
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Giant steps are what
you take walking on the moon
hope my leg dont break
you take walking on the moon
hope my leg dont break
I agree that even a few lines can awake an emotion, but they could not make the person see something in a new way. For that one would need a more complicated work
The thief left it behind:
The moon at the window
--Ryokan
Five seven five syllables and some clue to the season are generally the paramaters, but the second one is for the purists I suppose, apart from that, them's the rules.
clue to season voiced
vowels five seven five spake:
soon cometh the lambs
Edited: I meant syllables, I am on drugs methinks.
punkbass2000
Des An artiste
Veritass
Emperor
Juxtaposition
Coulter thread to Israel
God reveals Himself.
Coulter thread to Israel
God reveals Himself.
Sophie 378
Avvie by ybbor
Bartleby
Remembers laughter
this thread is longer
than the one from the old days
let the dead stay dead
than the one from the old days
let the dead stay dead
Swedishguy
Deity
What the heck is Haiku? 
It's five-seven-five
Over these three distinct lines
Remember and learn
EDIT: let's take bartleby's haiku as an example. A haiku has 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second and 5 again in the third.
It's common to have an unexpected ending, or something related to seasons.
Over these three distinct lines
Remember and learn
EDIT: let's take bartleby's haiku as an example. A haiku has 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second and 5 again in the third.
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than/[COLOR="Red"]the[/COLOR]/one/[COLOR="Red"]from[/COLOR]/the/[COLOR="Red"]old[/COLOR]/days
[COLOR="Red"]let[/COLOR]/the/[COLOR="Red"]dead[/COLOR]/stay/[COLOR="Red"]dead[/COLOR]It's common to have an unexpected ending, or something related to seasons.
