Rise of the British Empire( Civ 5 Version) Rewritten

[BritishEmperor]

Hi Everyone I will be writing a Story about the Rise of the British Empire. The Reason Why I Chose Great Britain is Because Britain is an Island Civilization and I want to in this Story and Game Make an Overseas Empire not a Continental one. The Story Will be About How Britain Came to Conquer the Entire Earth and Form a Global Empire. I am Already quite a bit through the game so for about 10 Chapters or so I will be writing about what I did before where I am now and as I write and post the Chapters I will be playing more of the game so most of the Story will be in written in the past Tense but I will try to write in the present tense. I will Post Whenever Possible within 2 day intervals or longer. Note: as I write I will be playing the game I am writing about so practically all of the story would be written in a past perspective and at a past view point of the events that unveil as I play the game.

Next Chapter England and the English Commonwealth
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[BritishEmperor]

Note: for all of the Story there Won't be any pictures until next time I do a Story as Great Britain

So Let's Get Started then. Winston Churchill Stteled the English People in London. He Promised the English People that London will one day be the Capital of the Earth. So after I settled London I Sent a Warrior to Capture the Endinburgh(Scotland) Settlers Becuase they never settled Edinburgh. I got a Worker from that conquest and started Improving the English Country Side. Suddenly I entered the Classical Era. And Finished Optics Using a Great Scientist. Then Instantly I Bought a Settler and Settled
Coventry where Endinbugh was supposed to settle. Then I suddenly Bought a Millitary Composed of 2 Worriers, 2 Spear Man and 2 Achers. Now that I have A Fully Atablished Military I started Drawing up War Plans Against The City State of Dublin(Ireland).

Epilogue for this Chapter: Prime Minister Winston Churchill of the Commwealth of England was proud of his enthusiastic Fellow Men's Success so he presented a map to the People of their Ecomplushments over the years in 3720BC the Crowd Cheered and the Army Marched in Honour. Churchill now Happy with his Generals started Drawing the Battle Lines for a War with Ireland.

Next Chapter: The Commonwealth at War!
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[BritishEmperor]

Note: This is a Transition Chapter between Chapter 1 and 2

Chapter 1.5 Chapter 2 Prologue: It Was Sunny the next Morning in London in Churchill's Wonderful Classical Age Palace and His Generals Including his great General Oliver Cromwell. Came in to his Office " Yes Officers what can I do for you" said Churchill Surprised. "Sir we have information Regarding your Plans to Invade Ireland"Said Cromwell Sternly. " Yes What Information" Said Churchill. "Well it is good news Sir your State of the Art Archers are position to strike Dublin exactly as you planned" Said Cromwell. " Good I have already sent them a Declaration of War Strike Now!" Said Churchill.

END OF THE PROLOGUE TO BE CONTINUED IN CHAPTER 2 COMMONWEALTH AT WAR!

 

[Save_Ferris]

Need screenshots!

 

[BritishEmperor]

Note: there will not be any pictures in this Story Until the Next Time a do a story as Great Britain

"Archers On your Marks,Get Set, Arrows Away!" Said Oliver Cromwell Loudly. Then Suddenly Arrows started Showering Dublin Fire Spread Quickly. " Listen Men we Are Under Heavy fire from the English Archers We need all of you to band together and defend yourselves"Said the Irish King to his subjects on the day of the strike. Later that Afternoon. "Arrows Away, Keep Firing until you've weakened them enough for our men!" Said Oliver Cromwell Happy that he is winning the War.

I then Continued to Use my Archers to Bombard Dublin's Position Until I had Reduced them to about 30% Health for My Warriors and Spear Men to Invade and take the City State. Then Dublin was well reduced by my Bombardment and I sent in My Spear Men and Warriors Over the Irish Sea to Invade Ireland when my Armies Where in Place I Attacked with Deadly Power and I Conquered Dublin. The War Was Over within 3 Turns

It Was a fine Evening in Churchill's Classical Age Palace and Suddenly Prime Minister Winston Churchill's Great General Oliver Cromwell Came into his Office. "Sir We Have Good News"Said Cromwell In a Good mood. "Yes Officer" Said Churchill in a Confused Manner. " Sir Your Archers Nearly Completely Destroyed Dublin we Are Ready to Invade Ireland Sir" Said Cromwell. " Ok Cromwell this Better be good Rail in the Spear Men then the Warriors,those Irish will not know what is in store for them"Said Churchill Approving of Cromwell's Proposal." Yes Sir I Agree this shall be a Swift Victory" Said Cromwell. Later that The Next Morning in 3640BC the English Commonwealth Troops Invaded Ireland and Attacked Dublin with a Deadly Attack and the Irish King Surrendered.

Epilogue: " I Surrender my Kingdom to you Cromwell, Just don't Kill any more Innocent People." Said the Irish King Giving up his Kingdom to the English. After Successfully Annexing Ireland into England English Prime Minister Winston Churchill Reallyed up his People and Government to his Pallace. " Ladies and Gentlemen I have good News We Have Sucessfuly Annexed Ireland, From this Day Forward The Eglish Commonwealth Will be Reorganised into the United Kingdom of Great Britain!" Said Winston Churchill Declaring the Formation of Britain In 3600BC.

Next Chapter: The I Age of Discovery
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[MisterSaturnine]

This is near-impossible to read. There are rules to capitalization, you know. You can't go dispensing upper cases willy-nilly. And I'm sorry to say that narrating the events of a game just isn't very interesting, especially when the narration is as barebones as this. Not only is it hard to read, but I just don't think it's worth reading. If you provided screenshots, at least, this story might get a little more positive attention.

 

[Sparthage]

Here's my translated version:

Note: There will not be any pictures in this story until the next time a do a story as Great Britain

"Archers on your marks, get set, arrows away!" said Oliver Cromwell loudly. Then, suddenly, arrows started showering Dublin and a fire spread quickly throughout the city.

"Listen men, we are under heavy fire from the English Archers. We need all of you to band together and defend yourselves," said the Irish King to his subjects on the day of the strike.

Later that Afternoon: "Arrows away! Keep firing until you've weakened them enough for our men to take them!" said Oliver Cromwell, happy that he was winning the War.

I then continued to use my archers to bombard Dublin's position until I had reduced them to about 30% Health for my warriors and spearmen to invade and take the City State. Then Dublin was well reduced by my bombardment and I sent in my spearmen and warriors over the Irish Sea to invade Ireland. When my armies were in place, I attacked with deadly power and conquered Dublin. The war was over within 3 Turns

It was a fine evening in Churchill's classical age palace, and suddenly Prime Minister Winston Churchill's great general Oliver Cromwell came into his office. "Sir, we have good news," said Cromwell in a good mood.

"Yes, Oliver," said Churchill in a confused manner.

"Sir your archers nearly completely destroyed Dublin and we are ready to invade Ireland, Sir," said Cromwell.

"Ok Cromwell, this had better be good rail (NOTE: What?) in the spearmen then the Warriors, those Irish will not know what is in store for them," said Churchill, approving of Cromwell's proposal."

Yes Sir, I agree. This shall be a swift victory," said Cromwell.

Later that the next morning, the English Army invaded Ireland and attacked Dublin in a deadly attack, forcing the Irish King to surrender.

Epilogue: "I surrender my kingdom to you, Cromwell. Just don't kill any more innocent people." said the Irish King (NOTE: Giving him a name, would be wise) giving up his kingdom to the English.

After successfully annexing Ireland into England, the English Prime Minister, Winston Churchill, rallied up his people and government to his Palace. "Ladies and Gentlemen, I have good news. We have successfully annexed Ireland. From this day forth, the English Commonwealth will be reorganized into the United Kingdom of Great Britain!"

I'd suggest using MS Word to proofread your story before you post it next time.

 

[BritishEmperor]

Ladies and Gentlemen I will try to improve my Story but sometimes when I write I forget some of the most important things like proper "Capitalisation and proper grammar" but I can improve that in the next Chapter but when it comes to screenshots I can't add them I am to far in the game to make screen shots for this Chapter or the future Chapters because I'm quite far into the story. But next time I promise I will provide screenshots.

 

[Tambien]

This is near-impossible to read. There are rules to capitalization, you know. You can't go dispensing upper cases willy-nilly. And I'm sorry to say that narrating the events of a game just isn't very interesting, especially when the narration is as barebones as this. Not only is it hard to read, but I just don't think it's worth reading. If you provided screenshots, at least, this story might get a little more positive attention.

plus, you just used impossibletareed in the above post, ever heard of sentences?

 

[Oohforf]

This is near-impossible to read. There are rules to capitalization, you know. You can't go dispensing upper cases willy-nilly. And I'm sorry to say that narrating the events of a game just isn't very interesting, especially when the narration is as barebones as this. Not only is it hard to read, but I just don't think it's worth reading. If you provided screenshots, at least, this story might get a little more positive attention.

Perhaps you should post a bit more positive criticism, like Sparthage previously did. Maybe English isn't his native language, ever think of that?

 

[Lose]

good read but need pics

 

[The_J]

Moderator Action: Story continues in a new thread, please see here.
Moderator Action: And as additional note: Grammar nazism, nitpicking on spelling, etc. are not things we like to see here. I know it might be tempting to correct someone, but please don't do it if you can't be nice in that post. English is not everyones first language, and even then it might be problematic for people due to different reasons, so be nice, it's not always the persons fault, or else please don't say anything.

Thread closed, please continue in the above mentioned one.