Princes of the Universe, Part I
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Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Negative on the grey block at my end.
Maybe you've been staring at the computer screen too long. Time to get some sleep!
wenamon
Warlord
no grey block here.
great update sisuitil. Its ok to deviate from the screenies for little excursions like this one. It fleshes out the story of the Republic for us.
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Thanks, but be warned, this is the beginning of a BIG excursion--12 parts, 28,000 words--novella length. I thought it was going to be quick and easy to get Lucius to the end of his tale, but NOOOOOO...
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
All I did was put in a missing line break! You probably just put your glasses on or something...
carl corey
Deity
Wow, you're really going into writer mode, aren't you? I don't mind, as long as it's in someway tied to civ. 
Keep it going.
Keep it going.
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Thanks. It's what I want to do for a living one day, frankly; this gives me an opportunity to practice and get some feedback.Wow, you're really going into writer mode, aren't you? I don't mind, as long as it's in someway tied to civ.
Ultimate_Waffle
The soul devourer.
I think you'd make a great author. You just have to work on some of the spelling. There aren't very many spelling mistakes that you've made though. Keep up the good work ^_^.
IPEX-731BA5DD06
Deity
Sorry, but I have to say this, your ordering of the stories is out a bit, the kong miao should have gone in BEFORE Ceasar Killed and absorbed Isobela, and before the grand meeting of monarchs...well, bessie.
If your striving for perfection...little thing I know..but if you have the score of the people, who you've killed off in the story...it don't make sense...
So, either, hide the score...or reorder the story....
I must admit its got me in...like the ALC's.....its my drug of choice...
Me, I'm just a short tempered, frustrated prince player....
If your striving for perfection...little thing I know..but if you have the score of the people, who you've killed off in the story...it don't make sense...
So, either, hide the score...or reorder the story....
I must admit its got me in...like the ALC's.....its my drug of choice...
Me, I'm just a short tempered, frustrated prince player....
carl corey
Deity
He's rearranged things before to fit the story, and I don't much care about the score as I don't even look at it. Hiding the score would be ok, but I'd rather have him write interesting updates than worrying about little details like that. To each his own I guess. 
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Thanks. I'm not sure what spelling mistakes you're referring to--if it's the additional "u" in words like "colour", "honour", and "neighbour", that's because I'm Canadian, and we tend to prefer the veddy proper British spellings of those words, doncherknow old chap, eh wot?
Good catch. The Kong Miao DID get built long before Isabella died. I just wanted to use a screenshot with a picture of it to set the scene, and the only one available, of course, is from when it got built. I mean, you can see the Great Lighthouse is still being built in Antium, so the screenie is, in fact, from the time period of Chapter 8. Rest assured, however, that the other screenshots I'll use in the story are from the time period in which this one is set. Sorry about the confusion. Maybe I'll replace it with a simple screenie of Antium from the proper year, more or less.Sorry, but I have to say this, your ordering of the stories is out a bit, the kong miao should have gone in BEFORE Ceasar Killed and absorbed Isobela, and before the grand meeting of monarchs...well, bessie.
If your striving for prefection...little thing I know..but if you have the score of the people, who you've killed off in the story...it don't make sense...
So, either, hide the score...or reorder the story....
I must admit its got me in...like the ALC's.....its my drug of choice...
Me, I'm just a short tempered, frustrated prince player....
I would advise you to not get too caught up in the dates on the screen shots. It's the one thing I myself have to let go to write a story like this. Civ's timeline is not very accurate; it works for the game, but not for storytelling. I mean, once you get to the modern age, it doesn't take a whole year or more to cross from one side of a continent to another! And people in the ancient era of the game would, realistically, be dead long before the significant events I've portrayed occurred within their lifetimes. It's something I noticed Helmling struggled with as well.
Ultimate_Waffle
The soul devourer.
I don't even remember what the mistakes were, because it was such a long time ago that I caught them. It might not be you that made the spelling mistakes now that I think about it. Maybe it was somebody else?
Also, you say you like to use the British spelling of words? I say old bean! I must express my astonishment at your claim! Is this fact, or a CLEVER RUSE?
Sorry, I'm a bit weird sometimes...
Also, you say you like to use the British spelling of words? I say old bean! I must express my astonishment at your claim! Is this fact, or a CLEVER RUSE?
Sorry, I'm a bit weird sometimes...
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Canadians have an inherent inferiority complex; it comes from living next door to a superpower. Retaining British spellings are one of the many small, somewhat pathetic little things we do that we think will somehow set us apart from Yanks.I don't even remember what the mistakes were, because it was such a long time ago that I caught them. It might not be you that made the spelling mistakes now that I think about it. Maybe it was somebody else?
Also, you say you like to use the British spelling of words? I say old bean! I must express my astonishment at your claim! Is this fact, or a CLEVER RUSE?
Sorry, I'm a bit weird sometimes...
Ultimate_Waffle
The soul devourer.
Well, anyway... Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading the next chapter soon.
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Okay, following IPEX-731BA5DD06's suggestion, I updated the screenshots. I went back into an old save of the game I had and grabbed some more appropriate ones. Be warned that this may make screenshots from later chapters a little inconsistent, since I may not have repeated all my steps EXACTLY as I did the first time through the game. But like I said, I'm telling a story with a few pretty pictures, not giving a blow-by-blow account of a game. If you want that, check out my ALC threads.
It was really strange, by the way, playing vanilla Civ IV again! I've been playing with the patched Warlords expansion pack for several months now, and I'd forgotten how many changes it made. It was weird looking in a city screen, for example, and having to get a calculator out to know when its next Great Person was going to appear!
And I kept expecting my next Great General to generate (I was obviously bound for disappointment there).
At any rate, I now have a few appropriate screenshots for this very long part of the story, and I even got a couple of ideas for some interesting revisions of it. I hope to have the next part up in a couple of days.
It was really strange, by the way, playing vanilla Civ IV again! I've been playing with the patched Warlords expansion pack for several months now, and I'd forgotten how many changes it made. It was weird looking in a city screen, for example, and having to get a calculator out to know when its next Great Person was going to appear!
And I kept expecting my next Great General to generate (I was obviously bound for disappointment there). At any rate, I now have a few appropriate screenshots for this very long part of the story, and I even got a couple of ideas for some interesting revisions of it. I hope to have the next part up in a couple of days.
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
Sisiutil
All Leader Challenger
The next part of the current story will be posted tonight.
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