Strider,
Apologies for taking so long before doing a more thorough read of your proposal. Hope these points will be helpful.
One thing I don't think you've explained very clearly is that power resides with the Citizenry and the officials only have what power is given to them by the people. I know you have clauses in there that say this to an extent, but I know that I didn't fully realise this for a long time after I joined the game and I had made an effort to read the constitution and CoL. It might sound as if it would be a bit cheesy and over the top to spell it out even more, but ithink it is very important. Also, coming from a country that doesn't have a neat constitution in RL I know it can be surprisingly easy to forget these things.
B2. Office of Culture: I don't think they should be limited to religion only on our own continent.
B4. Office of Research and Development: I think control of sliders should be given to the President. It affects income and culture as well as research.
B5. The Censors Office: bit pedantic, but would 'The Census Office' or 'Office of the Censor' sound better? I prefer the second.
B6. Designated Players. Please emphasise the need to stop playing if encountering a situation that must have citizen input or where an official has requested it. Also we should point out that officials should not post instructions to the effect that 'they can be amended at the turnchat'. In general I think we should ask the DP to stop when in doubt, but I'm not sure how to phrase this so it doesn't become an impossible burden.
C1. Governors. I think the previous CoL mentioned something about states. While I think that was overblown and long-winded I think we might want to consider a simpler form here. Later in the game if we have a lot of cities, we may have more cities than govenors.
D. Amending CoL. I know we can't require a stricter set of rules than the Constitution, but I think a simple majority with a 48 hour poll is not strict enough. Quite a few people are unavailable some Sat/Sun and with timezones etc you could easily exclude them with a well timed poll.
E. Pedantic: how about "No citizen may run for the same office for than 2 consecutive terms"?
E 1and 2. I don't like the term 'approximately'. Open to all kinds of abuse (and ridiculous legal complaints after the event). How about 'at least 7 days' and 'at least 3 days'?
J. I'm personally not familiar with the term 'sunset clause'. I'm sure I must know what it is, but can you explain?
Generally very pedantic: I think there needs to be a review of minor typos before this is proposed more widely.
However, thanks for drafting this. I think it is a definite improvement on what we have now.
Apologies for taking so long before doing a more thorough read of your proposal. Hope these points will be helpful.
One thing I don't think you've explained very clearly is that power resides with the Citizenry and the officials only have what power is given to them by the people. I know you have clauses in there that say this to an extent, but I know that I didn't fully realise this for a long time after I joined the game and I had made an effort to read the constitution and CoL. It might sound as if it would be a bit cheesy and over the top to spell it out even more, but ithink it is very important. Also, coming from a country that doesn't have a neat constitution in RL I know it can be surprisingly easy to forget these things.
B2. Office of Culture: I don't think they should be limited to religion only on our own continent.
B4. Office of Research and Development: I think control of sliders should be given to the President. It affects income and culture as well as research.
B5. The Censors Office: bit pedantic, but would 'The Census Office' or 'Office of the Censor' sound better? I prefer the second.
B6. Designated Players. Please emphasise the need to stop playing if encountering a situation that must have citizen input or where an official has requested it. Also we should point out that officials should not post instructions to the effect that 'they can be amended at the turnchat'. In general I think we should ask the DP to stop when in doubt, but I'm not sure how to phrase this so it doesn't become an impossible burden.
C1. Governors. I think the previous CoL mentioned something about states. While I think that was overblown and long-winded I think we might want to consider a simpler form here. Later in the game if we have a lot of cities, we may have more cities than govenors.
D. Amending CoL. I know we can't require a stricter set of rules than the Constitution, but I think a simple majority with a 48 hour poll is not strict enough. Quite a few people are unavailable some Sat/Sun and with timezones etc you could easily exclude them with a well timed poll.
E. Pedantic: how about "No citizen may run for the same office for than 2 consecutive terms"?
E 1and 2. I don't like the term 'approximately'. Open to all kinds of abuse (and ridiculous legal complaints after the event). How about 'at least 7 days' and 'at least 3 days'?
J. I'm personally not familiar with the term 'sunset clause'. I'm sure I must know what it is, but can you explain?
Generally very pedantic: I think there needs to be a review of minor typos before this is proposed more widely.
However, thanks for drafting this. I think it is a definite improvement on what we have now.
I'm stuck between sticking around and actually giving myself a chance at the election, or going to sleep and lose it.
