This is my feedback on Shaitan's feedback. I don't think enough things have been removed/dealt with.
Stuff I think should be deleted is underlined. Shaitan's italics for change, bold for remove have been left in.
Originally posted by Shaitan
Items I suggested changing are in italics. Items I suggest removing are in bold:
Article 1.1
PRIMARY GOAL:
1) To keep the Fanatikan people well heard with thier opinions, keeping the relationship between the government and the people in good standing.
ROLES AND OBLIGATIONS:
1) Work with judicacy to quickly identify invalid, strange or useless polls.
2) Work towards summarizing poll-results in the poll-index and registry.
3) Notify mods to close threads of outdated polls.
4) Initiate and organize discussion of poll rules and the standards for those rules.
5) Help citizens setup polls when they do not like to or do not know how to accomplish it.
6) Organize and schedule political debates.
7) Advise higher command on how to handle riots or citizen misbehavior.
8) To make sure the government and the people work together to make a better world.
Article 1.2
DUTIES:
1) Invalid, errored, strange, and useless poll detection, closing and deletion.
If a poll is found, he posts in judical thread for poll review. From there on, the judges take over. Eventually, the person holding the position will be able to make the distincion himself if no response is beheld within a week.
2) Issue a bi-monthly report summarizing all polls in that period of time. This report would also contain polls that were closed and/or deleted.
3) To close outdated polls. The Chief would now advise the command to close outdated polls or clear them out of the registry.(Remove this bolded part, it should be in the poll Standards, not part of the position description.) Also, in a period of 15 days after a similar polls closing, Citizen cannot create another poll of the same surface matter relating to the one that came before it.
4) The OPR (Remove this bolded part, this is already posted to the Judiciary thread. the OPR can simply subscribe to that thread.) MUST be advised beforehand on all changes to any law and SHOULD be consulted on poll laws, changes, and discussions.
5) Provide poll assistance for wording, or if the Citizen simply can not/does not have the ability to post a poll.
6) The orgaization of political debates is key to gather opinions from the vast majority of the citizens and could be refered to as NCM's. This event would take place at the beginning of every month. All Citizens are suggested but not required to attend such meetings.
7) The OPR should be notified of all matters of Citizen misbehavior, even how little disputes should be reported and documented for future purposes.
8) The OPR would be consulted and would advise on changes in poll laws, and standards.
Article 1.3
STRUCTURE OF OFFICE OF PUBLIC RELATIONS
Head Officer of Public Relations: Appointed by Chief Justice
Assitant Head Officer of Public Relations: Hired by Head Officer
Head of the Advisory Commission: Hired by Head Officer
Director of Elections: Hired by Cabinet
Director of Polling: Hired by Cabinet
Director of Organization and Issuing: Hired by Head Officer
Political Debate Organizer: Hired by Director of Organization and Issuing
HEAD OFFICER OF PUBLIC RELATIONS (APPOINTED):
1) Would oversee all OPR operations and give final input on all poll operations.
2)(All citizens have this vote already.) Has a vote on all matters concering the state and well being of Fanatikan security.
ASSITANT HEAD OFFICER OF PUBLIC RELATIONS (HIRED BY HEAD OFFICER):
1) Assists the HEAD OFFICER on all duties listed above.
HEAD OF ADVISORY COMMISSION (HIRED BY HEAD OFFICER):
1) The HAC's operations would fall under the jurisdiction of the Justices and is subject to critisim from that department.
2) The HAC would review ALL cases after a period of 30 days after final operation of polls and frequently monitor all polls to ensure the quality of the enviroment when polling.
DIRECTOR OF ELECTIONS (HIRED BY CABINET):
(Election poll schedules are set in the Code of Standards.) 1) Organizes and schedules all election polls, and Issues results for those closed.
DIRECTOR OF POLLING (HIRED BY CABINET):
1) Finalizes reports and summaries of reports including public opinion in replies to polls.
DIRECTOR OF ORGANIZATION AND ISSUING (HIRED BY HEAD OFFICER):
1) Organizes all OPR operations and moderates employees.
2) Organizes ALL political operations, including elections and inagurations.
(you know a department is too big if they need a staff manager. None of the roles here really need to be done by a seperate office, let alone an employed Office Bearer.)
POLITICAL DEBATE ORGANIZER (HIRED BY DIRECTOR OF ORGANIZATION AND ISSUING):
1) Develops political debates for all parties.
2) Moderates all political debates.
(totally unessissary. The Inquisitaors develop debates and the the debate threads could easily be started/moderated by the director of elections.)
REQUIRMENT FOR FILLING ALL POSITIONS: Must be impartial to any and all ethnic (replace with INTREST groups, makes more sence.) groups (We don't have/allow parties.) and political parties to ensure unbaised moderation.
Article 1.4
CHANGES TO EXISTING ORGANIZATIONS
1) The OPR would become somewhat of an official PSC (polling standards commision). The two organizations would work intimately together on all aspects of power allocated to the OPR. After a period of 3 months, a vote will be taken on weither or not to merge the two organizations. Until that times arises, the OPR MUST consult the PSC on all operations.
(this paragraph should be removed entirely. We are creating this office independant of the PSC. It assumes the roles unofficially undertaken by the PS commissioner, but that is all. There is no reason to disband the PSC. If it becomes irrelevant it will just drop of the first forum page. Besisdes, how do you merge a citizen group with an office?)
Article 1.5
POSITION IN GOVERNMENT
1) The OPR would have advisory status in the government. The OPR would be let in on ALL aspects of military functions because these actions threaten the lives of citizens under the consitituion of Fanakia.
(I think this may ge a little to far and over strsses the importance of the role. The millitary department has to let everyone know what they are doing, the PRC office should not get special treatment)
2) Positions in the OPR would be appointed as specified.
(Remove this. Trying to create another Department will doom the whole proposal to failure.) 3) Until the coming of the second term, the OPR would remain a unelected office run by a hired Head Officer by the President of Fanakia and/or subordiants. When the second term arises, the OPR would then become a official department in the state and become under elected operators.
I have tried to cut this back to make it more workable. Two offices at least should be removed. The demogame RPG office has only five positions and requires alot more work.