JalNES II: Quicker and Easier

We're not going to revisit this, are we? :p

Evelyn Waugh = :sleep:

Did you and I ever get into this, or was this a conversation I sadly missed? I mean, I think you're wrong, possibly to the point of heresy, but thats a different issue :p

Also, that location isn't anything close to new, so did you just notice it? Only curious ;)

Jal: I demand to be placed near to Dachs so that we may enter into single combat.
 
King Zhou He Jin [1] ruled the Kingdom of Zhou. He was successful. He has taken over over a few crucial states of the Yellow River and the states that controll great trade. He has trained his army to great strength and took over fields of rice and mines of tin and copper. He has found the great stone Jade and bade his craftsmen to make him a suit of jade for the afterlife, to keep his body alive to see all that happens to the world and accept his tribute.

However, his wealth iniciated jealousy and envy. The great cities all tried to assassinate the king in hopes they would capture the Jade in the great anarchy they thought would consume the world. As Jade passed through out the land, the bronze Triangles became worthless as Jade Wax-signers are given to all governers. Hundreds of pounds of beautiful jade was was distributed and the price of bronze went up. The cities are ever more desperate.

One day, two assassins stalked into the King's chamber from opposite sides. One of which has been known to be payed 30 kilos of grain and a kilo of jade. They stalked, unknown to each other. And while the king was changing, one armed with a blow gun blew his poisoned dart out.

The king bent down to ruffle his skirt as the poisoned dart pass over him. The second assassin, with his bow, tried to kill the king but was hit by the dart. Giving a strangled cry, he let go of his bow and an arrow of misforturne flew and struck the first assassin, who died thinking the king is divine...

The king stood up, looking as the two dead assassins, yelled, "Guards! Assassins!" as he took his own sword and prodded the now dead corpses. As he bent down a throwing ax pass over his head, and as the startled double-agent/guard looked as he missed, he hit another guard throwing a dagger, and othe assassins struck the wrong target: each other... so both double agents are killed.

The King bent up to see a final assassin, a boy, carrying a dagger, peered over the side and seeing the corpses of 4 assassins, he fled...

A year later King He Jin was dead.

Spoiler :
Just a joke on how he died.
[1] it means 'Combined strength'




Spoiler :
Wow! Although less detail than the likes of Jason the King or BirdJaguar (well, what used to be bird jaguar... something happened to her/his updates...)
You still manage to run it fast!

I'll write a story on how the Jade Trade sparked many states to pay assassins to kill the king and to try to win it after his death. What happened is they are paying more and more to assassins and also more minor tribute due to inflation that when the king is actually killed, only those that aren't connected by the more advanced roads escaped to fight over the lodes, and the new King Zhou Hin Shi retained it.

He learned his lesson for sure! And the lode is still there. Story soon.

 
It was a busy day in Shlobi. The recently “liberated” cities were bringing in many resources and people. Shlobi’s harbors now swelled with men and women trading goods such as ivory and jewels with each other. Ships raced to towns on the coast, merchants hastily getting back to Shlobi to get their next batch of goods to sell.

However, on the borders, trouble was brewing. It was heard that one of the more primitive cities to the south has a terrible king who was heavily taxing his people and in some cases enslaving them. Many people were fleeing the city to Sumbiti, telling their tales of sorrow to those who would listen. They mentioned their king, King Sulliti with many harsh words. Many Sumbiti were outraged by this and slowly their rage turned to action. Ships were loaded with supplies and soldiers. Men with spears rushed down jungle paths, determined to reach their destination. The liberation was about to begin.

The sailors slowed their ships as the city that housed the tyrant Sulliti came into sight. They slowly blocked off all access the city could have to sea trade. But that was not all. The group of spearmen dispatched arrived a few days latter, harassing trade routes on land and diverting trade to Sumbiti held cities.

Soon, King Sulliti sent out his troops. A small group of soldiers ran out of their city to find no-one in sight. They ventured into the jungle, looking for their enemies. However, the troops of Sumbiti had no quarrels with foot soldiers. They just sought to get rid of King Sulliti. The soldiers sent out by King Sulliti were led on a wild goose chase as the Sumbiti troops constantly avoided them and sometimes even disguised themselves as traders.

With fewer troops in the city, the ships arrived to the shore, unloading many warriors. They were easily able to march into the city and demand the surrender of King Sulliti. The people inside the city rejoiced at the sight of their liberators.

King Sulliti himself was not let off the hook for his treachery and was given to his former slaves as a slave. With the city without a leader, the Sumbiti replaced King Sulliti with a replacement. Slowly this replacement pushed the people of the city to join the Sumbiti, tempting them with wealth and protection. And within a couple years it worked. Another city had been taken under the wing of justice.
 
EDIT: By the way, what would have happened had I not got that story bonus?
You'll never know... ;)

From Neo-Kadria
To Independent City-States (OOC: Of Syria region- and this doesn't count Carcimesh. I put this because I don't know their names)

I propose we form a Triple Alliance, with an agreement that we will aid each other in any war against Carcimesh, and that we will partition any gains from such wars equally. Finally, we will agree never to extract tribute from each other for the rest of eternity.

OOC: These are Qatna and Emar, as shown on this map.

From: Emar
To: Neo-Kadria


We agree.

From: Qatna
To: Neo-Kadria


No. We have chosen to align ourselves with Gebal [OOC: Better known as Byblos].

From Neo-Kadria
To to the state to our southeast

I propose an alliance on equal terms.

OOC: Not sure which state you mean, but...

From: The State
To: Neo-Kadria


No. Why should we ally with a city that is constantly sacked?

Jal: I demand to be placed near to Dachs so that we may enter into single combat.

Fine, but please fill out some sort of culture template. I'd recommend either Byblos-Qatna or a proto-Hittite kingdom, depending on your mood.

Also, will this upcoming turn see more NPC's? It does not matter to me either way, it's more to help matters of where I should spend and not spend :p

Almost certainly. They exist right now, there just aren't any real multi-city states and I haven't made stats. Since next turn will probably start the IT, they will gain stats.

Wow. A very well written update indeed, jal. Props for being able to understand my meandering order style too. :) Of the various Hurrian successor states, I think I'll go with Carchemish.
Consider it yours.
 
To Hadir Unicus
From Men-nefer


We should discuss expansion plans, as we would prefere to avoid war if at all possible.

To Men-nefer
From Hadir Unicus


Yes, we should. We have proven that we can work together in the past, let it not fail to happen again. Unicus between the two nations will only help both.

To Hadir Unicus
From Men-nefer


We invite you to visit the great city of Men-nefer. There we will feast and be entertained. Once we are satisfied I will have our men discuss the lands we desire.

OOC: Good show, PM me the land you want.
 
In Hadir, there stood a small shack. In the slums of the city, where the freedmen made their homes, a small child was born to Zeita and Jormash. They named the boy, Nastifer. Knowing of the hard life that awaited this small, innocent child, the two parents could only feel pity for what was to come. But the child was oblivious, and was a small, almost nonexsistant beacon of light which shown happiness on its parents' faces. It was the one thing both looked forward too coming home to at the end of the day, after toiling in the fields for so many hours.

The boy grew, and though he wasn't a slave, his lifestyle was that one. He was now ten, and old enough to tend the fields with his parents. While only receiving one Sheka a day, it was barely enough to help his family get by, but somehow, his family had managed.

As devout followers of Yori, his parents made sure he knew his religion. In the off hours, before he would go to sleep for the night, his parents would lecture him on Unicus, but specifically the words of Yori, who they claimed was the wisest of all the Gods. Young Nastifer soaked it all in with an eagerness that every boy who wanted to know his people's past shared. He too was now a devout follower of Yori.

When the boy came of age, twenty years old, he left his home. It was customary of boys that age to leave home and find start a family, however, he was different. As soon as he could, with what little money he saved up, he left home, and didn't return for over fifteen years.

He set out to find the Halls of the Gods.

He traveled past Men-nefer, to the lands of the unknown, following the Great River to the site of the Halls of the Gods. It was rumored that the river flowed from heaven itself, and that at its source was where the Unicus Gods lived. No mortal had ever seen the magnificent halls. They were rumored to be made out of pure ivory, with strange creatures guarding the entrance. Mortals were not supposed to visit this sanctuary where the Gods ruled over everything. The giant beasts that stalked the waters of the Great River were said to be merely the weakest of the God's guardians, sent to spy on the humans and keep them under control. If that was true, the boy knew he had to be careful.

Legend tells of how he came to the Halls. It was night when he reached the giant lake that guarded the halls. He had passed through strange territory to get here. Lands infested with animals he had never seen before. Elephants roamed, but so did strange horned animals that traveled in giant herds. He had seen weird white-and-blacked striped horses. He had even seen, what he thought, were wild men watching him in the trees. But now, he was at the lake.

He knew he was as far as anyone had ever been. The lake stretched before his eyes, and he lashed together a makeshift raft out of near by materials. As he cast off, he noticed small black spots in the water at a distance. Beyond them, he knew, had to be the Halls. He paddled towards the black spots and, not to his surprise, it was a herd of Hippos guarding the the small island that the Halls were on. He could see the awe-inspiring structure grow larger as he got closer. He knew he would not be worthy of entering the halls unless he braved the danger of the Hippos. He had come all this way, and he wouldn't let himself fail. To prove his worth, he abandoned his raft and swam through the herd.

It had taken a moment before the beasts realized he was there, but once they did, they came at him aggressively. Chasing him to shore, gaining speed, he knew at once that it was going to be the end of himself. Yet somehow he managed. He made it to shore, with the monsters still after him. He hid as soon as he could and, to his surprise, his pursuers sniffed around for a bit, then turned and went back into the water. He knew he was worthy.

Upon his return, he would not speak about what had happened within the Halls. He had spent many years there, living amongst the Gods. They had shared with him many secrets, being the first human to make it to their home. Yori himself blessed him with the greatest luck of any person to date. He was sent back to Hadir to lead the people as the new High Priest, and to prove he was the chosen one, he was given Yori's gold crown. It was this one piece of evidence that convinced everyone, upon his return, that he was the chosen one to lead the people's of Hadir Unicus into a much brighter tomorrow.
 
From: Neo-Kadria
To: Qatna
CC: Emar, Gebal

If Emar agrees, we can bring Gebal into the alliance on the same terms.

From Neo-Kadria
To Other State

We were only sacked when fighting the united Hurrians- the Hurrians are no longer united. If, hypothetically, some force conquers us, then a small city state like yourself will be easy prey. We will ensure greater security for you.
 
Did you and I ever get into this, or was this a conversation I sadly missed?
No, it was a play on the book's title.
LittleBoots said:
I mean, I think you're wrong, possibly to the point of heresy, but thats a different issue :p
I'm already a heretic. Nice try though.
LittleBoots said:
Also, that location isn't anything close to new, so did you just notice it?
Yes. You and I don't tend to hang out in the same threads these days what with das not moderating at the moment.
LittleBoots said:
Jal: I demand to be placed near to Dachs so that we may enter into single combat.
Hey, man, that's not cricket. :p
OOC: Not sure which state you mean, but...
Akkad?
jalapeno_dude said:
Consider it yours.
Thanks.
 
From: Neo-Kadria
To: Qatna
CC: Emar, Gebal

If Emar agrees, we can bring Gebal into the alliance on the same terms.

From Neo-Kadria
To Other State

We were only sacked when fighting the united Hurrians- the Hurrians are no longer united. If, hypothetically, some force conquers us, then a small city state like yourself will be easy prey. We will ensure greater security for you.
Both offers are refused; Akkad because Jason may still be playing, Gebal because it believes it doesn't need the help.
 
By "Other State", I meant the city state to my direct southeast, not Akkad.
 
@ mod

I'm leaving today and to my horror I didn't get to send orders. Please use my last turn orders. Perhaps more cities along the River. Also, choke jade and monied bronze minting until economy stables. Thanks!
 
I will drop out of this, my newborn daughter is taking alot of our time, and since I haven't sent orders in for this yet, nothing is lost. Hopefully this will be the only NES I will have to drop out of right now as everything else updates slowly... :p Sorry.
 
I hadn't got around to saying it yet: I enjoyed the update and generally approve of it greatly.

Karanu: ordinances sendified!

From: Karanu
To:Sumbiti

We admire your greatness, and hope that peace and trade will continue.

germanicus12 said:
my newborn daughter is taking alot of our time

@germanicus, wow, congratulations! :D
 
7 hours, and I'm still missing 5-6 orders. Please get them in, even if they're a few hours late.
 
Still missing the Chinese (minus Charles Li), NK and Littleboots...
 
Orders incoming soon.
 
sorry! I'm still in New york. Please reuse old orders with:

More crafted jade and bronze and much less raw jade and bronze.
Burcracy.
Walls in all cities.
City guards.
thanks!!
 
sorry! I'm still in New york. Please reuse old orders with:
He said that you were the only person in China who did get him some kind of orders. :p
 
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