No. No no no. I'm glad to see your creativity, but please read the backdrop story for this NES before writing stories like that. Your story doesn't fit in one bit. There are no aliens, there are no factions that controlled the universe, there have been no major faction wars. The galaxy pre-scourge was fairly peaceful (on the surface), and ultimately extremely human. It was corporate space, with true factions (like in this NES) only really rising after the scourge, when the old playing field was completely levelled.In theory your story could have taken place way before humans colonized the galaxy, but then it falls on the fact that I wouldn't let you play a non-human faction.
Also my comment about losing your fleet was not to say that you should explain it, what I meant was that the fleet would have been taken by the scourge, much like everything else in the galaxy.
Sorry to kill your story like this, but please read the setting first.
I reread it again and saw what I did wrong, again I apologize and will try my best to keep up.
