Neverwonagame3
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Do stories and story bonuses work as usual, is there no story bonuses, are stories not allowed (there is a case for that), or what?
JalNES II: Quicker and Easier
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jalapeno_dude
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Dachs, is this location for Urkesh correct? My eyes are bleeding from trying to figure that map out...
Stories are allowed and encouraged as the primary means of developing your culture. Story bonuses may or may not be given--they have a tendency to cause spamming of subpar stories, unfortunately. I'm open to arguments either way.
Stories are allowed and encouraged as the primary means of developing your culture. Story bonuses may or may not be given--they have a tendency to cause spamming of subpar stories, unfortunately. I'm open to arguments either way.
Neverwonagame3
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Perhaps my state should be Neo-Kadria? Anyway, I'll actually reserve the Euphrates for the sake of actually being able to make stories easier.
The First Kadrian Empire
NOTE: I will continue to use the name Kadria, but the culture's 'actual' name is something more linguistically appropriate.
When the Hurrians invaded, the Kadrians were not a major power, though they were on the first tier of tribes below such. One of their primary advantages was being in a posistion near the limit of where the Hurrians would advance, but not actually at it.
The rulers of Kadria decided to begin by provoking the Hurrians into attacking, then giving a false promise to a state roughly equal in power to become their vassal in exchange for aid. This allowed them to weaken the Hurrians on their border.
The next step was to defeat the state they had sworn allegiance to. They did this by having a mixture of members of the 'tribute escort' and 'merchants' attack at midnight of the night tribute was paid (the king had allowed his own son to become a hostage due to avoid enemy suspicion. He ended up dead).
The weakened tribes on the edge of "Hurria" did not have any particular good relations with the others, so the rising Kadria decided to begin a counterattack. This established Kadria as a formidable empire, but it's height was yet to come.
This came when the powerful state of _____ in the south began to rally a coalition against the dishonourable king of Kadria. The king knew he had an ailment that would kill him fairly soon, but successfully covered it up to his family. This was practice, as he allowed himself to become a hostage to his southern neighbour for good behavior.
With the king of Kadria his direct hostage, while ultimately seeing through the ploy, saw through it too late. And rather then gamble on a repeat of their trick with the tribute delegation, the Kadrians had sent men to kill the enemy peasants as to prevent the _____ from raising troops. The king responsible for the rise soon died, but the empire was at it's height...
The First Kadrian Empire
NOTE: I will continue to use the name Kadria, but the culture's 'actual' name is something more linguistically appropriate.
When the Hurrians invaded, the Kadrians were not a major power, though they were on the first tier of tribes below such. One of their primary advantages was being in a posistion near the limit of where the Hurrians would advance, but not actually at it.
The rulers of Kadria decided to begin by provoking the Hurrians into attacking, then giving a false promise to a state roughly equal in power to become their vassal in exchange for aid. This allowed them to weaken the Hurrians on their border.
The next step was to defeat the state they had sworn allegiance to. They did this by having a mixture of members of the 'tribute escort' and 'merchants' attack at midnight of the night tribute was paid (the king had allowed his own son to become a hostage due to avoid enemy suspicion. He ended up dead).
The weakened tribes on the edge of "Hurria" did not have any particular good relations with the others, so the rising Kadria decided to begin a counterattack. This established Kadria as a formidable empire, but it's height was yet to come.
This came when the powerful state of _____ in the south began to rally a coalition against the dishonourable king of Kadria. The king knew he had an ailment that would kill him fairly soon, but successfully covered it up to his family. This was practice, as he allowed himself to become a hostage to his southern neighbour for good behavior.
With the king of Kadria his direct hostage, while ultimately seeing through the ploy, saw through it too late. And rather then gamble on a repeat of their trick with the tribute delegation, the Kadrians had sent men to kill the enemy peasants as to prevent the _____ from raising troops. The king responsible for the rise soon died, but the empire was at it's height...
alex994
Hail Divine Emperor!
I may have been the enemy of Safot Softim biQarthadast, but Kartyria was okay with me.Just playin' with you.
OOC: Ah yes, I almost forgot your little fight with sheep in ITNES
You know, I was cheering for you all the time since I couldn't stand sheep's own Punic Blood thing 
And didn't Kartyria betray you in the end? Before they themselves got betrayed 
I never wrote a sub-par story in your first nes even with the bonuses. I believe bonuses should be at your disgression
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OOC: Ah yes, I almost forgot your little fight with sheep in ITNES
What Punic Blood thing?
alex994
Hail Divine Emperor!
OOC: ITNES, Sheep's "racist" Carthaginian Empire (though he spelled it much differently, and differently everytime) snuffed out Dach's Rome after epic warfare lasting centuries and then instituting this whole blood ranking system.
germanicus12
First Citizen of Rome
The History of Tyros: The Founding
According to the legend of Tyros, a huge war was waged for control of the vital ports along the Fertile Crescent, on one side stood the armies of the south, while on the other stood the armies of the north. One certain figure in the northern armies stood out. This man was called Celio Kesa, he was the North's greatest General who commanded vast armies and won every battle he ever entered, whether it was defensive or aggressive, but as fate would have it, his army ran into the South's largest army and both sides engaged. Both sides had capable generals who knew what they were doing, and both sides had strong armies who were well fed and well equipped, the battle was fought on a beautiful landscape that sees blossoming flowers in the spring and green lush fields during the fall, the landscape had 2 distinct hills that lay directly north and south of each other and served as the army headquarters for both armies. All men fighting in that battle knew the fate of their country was at sake for a defeat here would be costly for both.
As the battle waged, General Kesa and his armies gained the upper hand early and forced several southern divisions to withdraw, but fate had other plans, for a local commander misunderstood some critical orders and failed to reinforce the left flank during their charge and the entire flank was surrounded and routed, but despite the setbacks the bravery and quick actions of General Kesa avoided a full rout of the center and his line held, but it was on its last breath for a deadly charge by the enemy on Kesa's right flank obilerated the exhausted recruits there and forced his center to withdraw, or less be surrounded. The armies of the south have finally handed General Kesa his first defeat of his career. Out of 25 battles, 24 were victories, and 1 was a humiliating loss, General Kesa and his hard core veterans from the center decided to escape by sea after running into some southern armies to his north.
At sea fate had another plan, a mighty storm was conjured and forced the ships to dock at an island to wait out the storm. This island was previously undiscovered by any culture on earth, but it was inhabited by some small villages and people who spoke a strange language. When the storm finally lifted, the troops were dismayed to discover that most of the fleet was lost, washed up against the nearby rocks, General Kesa after some deliberating with his top aides have decided to conquer the island and make a home. The veterans made quick work of the villagers and many chose to surrender instead, General Kesa has founded the world's first known island nation. After a small discussion which proved fruitless as General Kesa continued to name the island and the inhabitants, Tyros and Tyrion, respectively.
General Celio Kesa ruled as King of Tyros for the next 20 years before succumbing to old age. His son now rules, and Tyros has seen rapid growth in naval power and trade lanes. The future is bright, but how long will the light shine brightly? Though once he was able, King Tesa I sent a small fleet to investigate the fertile crescent to see who won the war and attempt to contact his leaders, but when his sailors arrived the ports were destroyed and no trace of the armies from both camps were seen. It was as if the armies just simply vanished.
According to the legend of Tyros, a huge war was waged for control of the vital ports along the Fertile Crescent, on one side stood the armies of the south, while on the other stood the armies of the north. One certain figure in the northern armies stood out. This man was called Celio Kesa, he was the North's greatest General who commanded vast armies and won every battle he ever entered, whether it was defensive or aggressive, but as fate would have it, his army ran into the South's largest army and both sides engaged. Both sides had capable generals who knew what they were doing, and both sides had strong armies who were well fed and well equipped, the battle was fought on a beautiful landscape that sees blossoming flowers in the spring and green lush fields during the fall, the landscape had 2 distinct hills that lay directly north and south of each other and served as the army headquarters for both armies. All men fighting in that battle knew the fate of their country was at sake for a defeat here would be costly for both.
As the battle waged, General Kesa and his armies gained the upper hand early and forced several southern divisions to withdraw, but fate had other plans, for a local commander misunderstood some critical orders and failed to reinforce the left flank during their charge and the entire flank was surrounded and routed, but despite the setbacks the bravery and quick actions of General Kesa avoided a full rout of the center and his line held, but it was on its last breath for a deadly charge by the enemy on Kesa's right flank obilerated the exhausted recruits there and forced his center to withdraw, or less be surrounded. The armies of the south have finally handed General Kesa his first defeat of his career. Out of 25 battles, 24 were victories, and 1 was a humiliating loss, General Kesa and his hard core veterans from the center decided to escape by sea after running into some southern armies to his north.
At sea fate had another plan, a mighty storm was conjured and forced the ships to dock at an island to wait out the storm. This island was previously undiscovered by any culture on earth, but it was inhabited by some small villages and people who spoke a strange language. When the storm finally lifted, the troops were dismayed to discover that most of the fleet was lost, washed up against the nearby rocks, General Kesa after some deliberating with his top aides have decided to conquer the island and make a home. The veterans made quick work of the villagers and many chose to surrender instead, General Kesa has founded the world's first known island nation. After a small discussion which proved fruitless as General Kesa continued to name the island and the inhabitants, Tyros and Tyrion, respectively.
General Celio Kesa ruled as King of Tyros for the next 20 years before succumbing to old age. His son now rules, and Tyros has seen rapid growth in naval power and trade lanes. The future is bright, but how long will the light shine brightly? Though once he was able, King Tesa I sent a small fleet to investigate the fertile crescent to see who won the war and attempt to contact his leaders, but when his sailors arrived the ports were destroyed and no trace of the armies from both camps were seen. It was as if the armies just simply vanished.
Jason The King
Deity
Akkadia
Dark red
Akkad
Government: Absolute Monarchy
Economy: Agriculture and plunder from war
Military: Made up of heavy infantry garnishing spears and bows, with a strong and vast chariot wing.
Culture: The religion is the standard polytheist religion. Each city has a chief god, though the entire pantheon is worshiped. Chief God of Akkad is Nonanost, the god of war. Akkadians, despite their thirst for war, dominance, and expansion, are also keen architects, taking pride in their huge temples and beautiful city buildings. Akkadians are not much for being traders, but do welcome friendly merchants within their borders to do the trading for them, while levying a hefty tax.
Description: Sprung up just like the rest of Mesopotamia.
Start me out in OTL Akkad.
Dark red
Akkad
Government: Absolute Monarchy
Economy: Agriculture and plunder from war
Military: Made up of heavy infantry garnishing spears and bows, with a strong and vast chariot wing.
Culture: The religion is the standard polytheist religion. Each city has a chief god, though the entire pantheon is worshiped. Chief God of Akkad is Nonanost, the god of war. Akkadians, despite their thirst for war, dominance, and expansion, are also keen architects, taking pride in their huge temples and beautiful city buildings. Akkadians are not much for being traders, but do welcome friendly merchants within their borders to do the trading for them, while levying a hefty tax.
Description: Sprung up just like the rest of Mesopotamia.
Start me out in OTL Akkad.
Looks like Mesopotamia and the Levant are getting awfully crowded. Daftpanzer and Azale have free run of their places right now.
I did go overboard with the whole thing though, having a grand total of what, four months' NESing experience under my belt?
Ahh, good times.
Yeah, that's good. Sorry about that. Will my territory really be that small, though?
I remember that, and appreciate it.
I did go overboard with the whole thing though, having a grand total of what, four months' NESing experience under my belt?What happened was weird.alex994 said:And didn't Kartyria betray you in the end? Before they themselves got betrayed
Spoiler ITNES I IT II and III :
...and then, in IT IV, four hundred years after my Roman Republic died and seven hundred fifty years after the original war started, I, as an Etrusco-Germanic barbarian tribe in charge of the Po River Valley, withstood a Punic invasion then allied with a rogue's gallery of past allies and even past enemies to retake Italy, march on Carthage itself, destroy the city, and then attack the last bastion of Punic territory in Spain and annihilate it. Any possibility of Carthage rising again in the New World was wiped out (perhaps serendipitously, I never knew) by Nortugal.
Ahh, good times.
Abaddon
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Egypt // Abaddon
Color: Gold
Capital: Memphis//Men-nefer
Government: Pharaoh
Economy: Agriculture, aquaculture & trade
Military: average/average
Culture: Its egypt!
Description: Its egypt!
Neverwonagame3
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We are supposed to be city states Abbadon, you should start with just one city.
Vertinari118
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Guo(Kingdom in english)/Vertinari 118
Light blue
Guozhong (Kingdom middle if I have got this right.)
Government: Monarchy with a court of arstiocarts and cival servents called eunuchs.
Economy: Mainly an agricultural state but this is supplemented by trade of crafted items. Guo bows are the most common trade good as they are in high demand.
Military: Large powerful archer cores with same sized though not as well equiped or trained infantry cores. No cavarly of any signifigence. Infantry use swords and spears. The Guo also has a small but strong navy.
Culture: A dualist religion with two Gods that govern the world. Xoluc at night and Xola in the day, they represent pretty much the same things as Yin and Yang.
Description:
Peace and unification are what the Guo emporors seek; they seek to unite the world into one kingdom. This is why Guo has its name. No one knows why the emporors wish to do this but it may have religious reasons. Emporors are also High Priests just to let you know.
Anymore objections?
Light blue
Guozhong (Kingdom middle if I have got this right.)
Government: Monarchy with a court of arstiocarts and cival servents called eunuchs.
Economy: Mainly an agricultural state but this is supplemented by trade of crafted items. Guo bows are the most common trade good as they are in high demand.
Military: Large powerful archer cores with same sized though not as well equiped or trained infantry cores. No cavarly of any signifigence. Infantry use swords and spears. The Guo also has a small but strong navy.
Culture: A dualist religion with two Gods that govern the world. Xoluc at night and Xola in the day, they represent pretty much the same things as Yin and Yang.
Description:
Peace and unification are what the Guo emporors seek; they seek to unite the world into one kingdom. This is why Guo has its name. No one knows why the emporors wish to do this but it may have religious reasons. Emporors are also High Priests just to let you know.
Anymore objections?
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Zhongguo/Vertinari 118
Light blue
Zhongguo City
Government: Same as RL China. Dynasties.
Economy: Mainly an agricultural state but this is supplemented by trade of crafted items. Zhongguo bows are the most common trade good as they are in high demand.
Military: Large powerful archer cores with same sized though not as well equiped or trained infantry cores. No cavarly of any signifigence. Infantry use swords and spears. The Zhongguo also has a small but strong navy.
Culture: A dualist religion with two Gods that govern the world. Xoluc at night and Xola in the day, they represent pretty much the same things as Yin and Yang.
Description: China has to be united under one empire. This is the belief of the Zhoungguo and this belief stems from their long subjection by a more powerful state. The Zhoungguo belief that all the people of the world are equal and must be unitied.
Does anyone know the english spelling of the Chinnese word for city?
Depending on what you mean by China, this is almost certainly unrealistic.
Vertinari118
Deity
NWAG 3 it is a belief. Belief has every right to be impossible or improbabale if you want me to change it I can? I guess you are talking about my description?
Vertinari118
Deity
Sorry that was a honest mistake I had no idea where Shanghai was! I will move shortly and change my description. Everyone happy?
jalapeno_dude
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@Dachs: At the start of update zero, yes--you're all city-states. You'll have several hundred-year updates to expand, though...
@Abaddon: Neverwonagame3 is right--you must start as a city-state. We'll just say that the First Intermediate Period continued longer than it did in OTL...
@Vertinari: Description is mostly fine, though you might want to change the thing about unifying China to some more-abstract belief in unification. And detail the government a bit more, please. Other than that and changing the location, you're fine.
@Lurkers: I highly encourage people to join in India and China. Otherwise I'll have to ask Daft to move, and that will make him sad...
@Abaddon: Neverwonagame3 is right--you must start as a city-state. We'll just say that the First Intermediate Period continued longer than it did in OTL...
@Vertinari: Description is mostly fine, though you might want to change the thing about unifying China to some more-abstract belief in unification. And detail the government a bit more, please. Other than that and changing the location, you're fine.
@Lurkers: I highly encourage people to join in India and China. Otherwise I'll have to ask Daft to move, and that will make him sad...
Abaddon
Deity
Erm, I gave two city names.. but its the same city.. I didn't know which language you would want it in.
jalapeno_dude
AKA Panda Judo Eel
I got that. I just meant that "it's Egypt" doesn't really help much when, in fact, it's not all of Egypt. What distinguishes the Memphis city-state from all the other Egyptian city-states?
Ninja Dude
Sorry, I wasn't listening...
That won't be needed my good man!
Sumbiti/Ninja Dude
Dark Green or something
Capital: Shlobi
Government: Monarchy
Economy: Trading ivory and other goods with a small group of trade ships.
Military: A large militia guarding Shlobi with a small group of trained soldiers guarding the king and places of importance (temples and stuff).
Culture: The Sumbiti people are very peaceful and quiet. They try to avoid attacking other groups of people due to their hatred of violence. However, they do have a strong sense of justice and will spill their blood for what they think is right.
Description: Shlobi rose to dominance when a tyrant ruled the small city. He sought to take all the land surrounding it from the "barbarians" surrounding him. However, these barbarians proved to be to strong and drove the tyrant out of the city. Slowly, these barbarians became the Sumbiti, rulers of the conquered city.
Location: Could you put me somewhere south of Daft?
Also, I just came up with random names. I'm not too keen when it comes to India history.
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