So I'm doing a little Public Speaking Thing

[Moss]

I read it, and once again, I must congratulate you on a solid piece of work! While giving a very personal account of your own life, at the same time you very elegantly manage to show how your own experiences can apply in other situtions as well. Also, I think the opening part is very good, and should set the scene for a close-and-personal kind of relationship to the crowd, which is always a good thing, of course. Not only is it a very good way to catch their attention, but it also, in my experience, is a good way to "warm yourself up", if you're feeling nervous.

All in all, I must say that I regret that I can't be there to listen to it! Good luck, Tyler.

Thanks, and I sorta look at it like I'm not lecturing the crowd, I'm carrying a conversation with the crowd, every one of them, and as a whole. There's a huge difference...hence the more personal non academic tone. And yeah, the volunteer and the ear throwing are definately ice-breakers, that and I'm pretty sure NO ONE has ever seen a speaker throw their body parts into an audience such as this. I'm not even sure how they'll react, but we'll find out.

Looks OK to me. Only thing: have you timed yourself giving the speech in front of a couple of people?

I've timed it, it's about right...it'll be a little faster I'm guessing once I'm on stage, but the time isn't a huge thing, just as long as I don't go over...going under is perfectly fine and may be well applauded by the audience. (don't want to bore them to death.) And no, I haven't practiced in front of people, just by myself...don't really have any people to practice in front of something I may look into though...I'll have to ask.

How long did it take you to write that? It's huge!

Two hours...not too long. I'm a fairly quick writer...although there's a few typos I missed and grammatical errors so I'd never turn it in for a college homework assignment or anything.

The volunteer thing can be dangerous. Just a question, what kind of people will show up there? You don't want to be embarrassed by a stranger in a bad mood, but I suppose you know how to handle it?

Audience will be mostly students and or faculty members of the college and a few outside community members. No kids, no underage students which is why I'm still thinking about using that swearword but I'm not sure.

And Weds.? Small celebrity status, then Oprah. I'll try and read it tomorrow.

No, and no...this is a one time thing... (well, maybe).

 

[amadeus]

This may not be right for you, but I personally would remove the more coarse language. I think it just shows a higher level of class.

 

[Moss]

It shows a higher level of class in the insult too...but like DoM said...I could just say this has been edited for your ears or something. I'm leaning towards the safe side now...specially after I practiced by myself once...the word does kinda hang out there, but then again, that's not necessarily a bad thing either.

 

[Duke of Marlbrough]

Or you can say it without saying it and still mention that a word or two may be censored.

____ = f'ing

 

[Birdjaguar]

If you present it half as well as it is written, you will succeed.

My only suggestion: cut the bolded sentence from the last paragraph:

Thank you all very much. It has been an honor and privilege to share part of my story with you today. I hope you learned something. If you ever have

 

[Nobody]

I am doing a speach on monday, but only 15 minutes

 

[Ultima Dragoon]

Two hours...not too long. I'm a fairly quick writer...although there's a few typos I missed and grammatical errors so I'd never turn it in for a college homework assignment or anything.

Good glaivin in a glass! It takes me 2 hours to write a 1-page speech that goes for ~4 minutes! Although I do think of it as I write it..... Typo's? Didn't see any or nothing really jumped out at me.

 

[Moss]

If you present it half as well as it is written, you will succeed.

My only suggestion: cut the bolded sentence from the last paragraph:

Thanks...and you know, I actually plan on presenting it twice as well as it is written...so hopefully that makes it worth someone wasting fifty minutes of their life for.

UD- This was pretty easy to write though, no research involved. It takes me a lot longer to do more academic endevours so I'm by no stretch of the imagination a writing wizard.

 

[The Fjonis]

So, how did it go, Moss? I'm curious!

 

[Rambuchan]

Yes so am I. Sorry I missed this thread before the event.

 

[Moss]

It went well...I thought...attendence was a little slim but other than that I thought I did a good job.

I have the link to the online stream of the video if anyone wants it. It's about forty minutes long. And the quality of the video I guess is okay you may have to turn your speakers up a bit to hear the sound. The quality of the speaker on the other hand . . . (PM me because I don't really want to post it in the public forum).

 

[RoboPig]

did you imagine everyone naked?

 

[Moss]

did you imagine everyone naked?

Nope...didn't need to.

Most of my friends couldn't be there, so I'm actually a lot more nervous about giving them the link to the video than I was when I actually gave the speech. If that makes sense.

 

[RoboPig]

Nope...didn't need to.

should have done it anyway......

 

[Moss]

should have done it anyway......

Well...I asked for a volunteer and a girl raised her hand so I asked her to come up on stage and you know, I wasn't thinking about it at the time because obviously I was trying just not to screw up, but when I watched the tape I realized that, you know, I really should have gotten her number or something afterwards.