BvBPL
Pour Decision Maker
How far into a relationship is it okay to send an original poem to a woman?
How Soon is Too Soon to Send a Woman a Poem?
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Narz
keeping it real
After at least 10 lovemaking sessions.
It depends on the poem. A lightweight poem about having cup of coffee together or how you heard the sound of her boots coming down the hallway might be appropriate very early. Something more obviously romantic or personal can probably wait a bit longer.
If you like writing poems, pace your delivery so she will savor each one.
If you like writing poems, pace your delivery so she will savor each one.
I start wooing right away with dirty limericks.
With the right woman, that might work. Can you post any of them? My risqué poems are all too graphic for posting here, but are s0me of my best.
This once was a guy named JR
Who often took it too far
Now a bit more mellow
Avoiding the red and the yellow
Such limericks confined to the bar.
Who often took it too far
Now a bit more mellow
Avoiding the red and the yellow
Such limericks confined to the bar.
BvBPL
Pour Decision Maker
So here's two. Neither is really finished. The first is a new one and this is basically it's first draft.
We are born from stardust,
Thrown off from the first naked singularity,
Before were born,
We burned in the void,
Rubbing up against each other amid cosmic eddies,
Matter calls to itself and creation arises,
The universe form from celestial congress,
We are born from stardust,
The heirs of Prometheus,
A Pentecostal flame upon our brows,
Our throats alight with brilliance,
Our words a forge with which to shape meaning,
We stand upon the shoulders of titans,
And we'll challenge the gods for heaven,
We are born from stardust,
I know because every time I kiss you,
I taste the starlight under your skin.
Okay, so that one needs some work. It wasn't originally going to be three separate parts like that, but I wanted the repetition in the last stanza. I mostly like the first stance, but the second one needs a lot of work. I like the Promethean imagery, but I'm not sure it works. It feels like it dissipates the frisson established in the first one.
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This next one is a remembering of an older one. I just moved so I can't put my finger on the old, finished copy right away. This is one is probably about 70% of the old one.
I want you,
Ever since I first scanned you,
I've wanted to upload you to my room,
Download your clothes to the floor,
And drip mega-love-bites down your trunk,
I'll give your digital divide a three-finger salute,
Double-click with my cursor,
And we'll find out if you are plug and play,
You've got "male,"
Latter on you can pick up the power cord,
With me giga-ling every time it hertz,
begging you to control me,
alter me,
delete the world around us,
and compile random,
access,
ecstasy.
That one, obviously, isn't a romantic poem. It is still pretty bad ass though.
We are born from stardust,
Thrown off from the first naked singularity,
Before were born,
We burned in the void,
Rubbing up against each other amid cosmic eddies,
Matter calls to itself and creation arises,
The universe form from celestial congress,
We are born from stardust,
The heirs of Prometheus,
A Pentecostal flame upon our brows,
Our throats alight with brilliance,
Our words a forge with which to shape meaning,
We stand upon the shoulders of titans,
And we'll challenge the gods for heaven,
We are born from stardust,
I know because every time I kiss you,
I taste the starlight under your skin.
Okay, so that one needs some work. It wasn't originally going to be three separate parts like that, but I wanted the repetition in the last stanza. I mostly like the first stance, but the second one needs a lot of work. I like the Promethean imagery, but I'm not sure it works. It feels like it dissipates the frisson established in the first one.
--
This next one is a remembering of an older one. I just moved so I can't put my finger on the old, finished copy right away. This is one is probably about 70% of the old one.
I want you,
Ever since I first scanned you,
I've wanted to upload you to my room,
Download your clothes to the floor,
And drip mega-love-bites down your trunk,
I'll give your digital divide a three-finger salute,
Double-click with my cursor,
And we'll find out if you are plug and play,
You've got "male,"
Latter on you can pick up the power cord,
With me giga-ling every time it hertz,
begging you to control me,
alter me,
delete the world around us,
and compile random,
access,
ecstasy.
That one, obviously, isn't a romantic poem. It is still pretty bad ass though.
onejayhawk
Afflicted with reason
Perfection
The Great Head.
What is your intent in sending said woman said poetry?
Mise
isle of lucy
That second one is fantastic. I'm not a good judge of poetry because I mostly enjoy puns and humour, but if you sent that to me, I'd probably let USB my boyfriend.
You could probably send the 2nd one very soon, before you were really in a "relationship" so called. But the 1st you'd have to wait a bit.
You could probably send the 2nd one very soon, before you were really in a "relationship" so called. But the 1st you'd have to wait a bit.
I like the first one (though you're right that it does need a bit of work).
Before sending a poem to a woman, try to find out if she's read much poetry, and if she's familiar with some of the references or metaphors you like to use. For example, a poem referencing Prometheus isn't going to work as well if she has no idea who that refers to.
The last stanza is perfect.
The second poem... not sure what to say about that.
But while we're on the topic of poetry, there's this activity going on down in A&E called Iron Pen, and it's a creative writing competition. We've done short stories so far, but I am planning at least one round that's poetry. If anyone here is interested in taking part, feel free to drop me a PM. I'm not sure when it will be held - that depends on peoples' schedules. Right now we're still in the reading/commenting/voting phase for the current round of stories, and everyone is welcome to participate (see my sig for the link).
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Formaldehyde
Both Fair And Balanced
Did anybody say anything about posting them here?
Mise
isle of lucy
I'd say BvBPL's relationship with CFC is strong enough to withstand a few of his poems.
BvBPL
Pour Decision Maker
Yeah, well that one isn't a romantic poem. It is a great poem to read in front of a crowd and a good one to get someone to laugh about sex. It is not, however, one to leave on the nightstand so she stumbles over it later in the day.
Hygro
soundcloud.com/hygro/
BvBPL you gotta screen out the ones who don't like what you like and want to keep about yourself. Our artistic sides need love and support and nurturing. She doesn't have to be your fan but she cannot be someone you don't want to show yourself to.
Unless you just tryna smang and she cool like that.
There once was a rum guzzling pirate
who met with a hng huh euhhh....
and that's when I learned to keep quiet.
Unless you just tryna smang and she cool like that.
There once was a rum guzzling pirate
who met with a hng huh euhhh....
and that's when I learned to keep quiet.
warpus
Sommerswerd asked me to change this
It depends on the woman and the poem. You could probably recite funny and context appropriate haiku poetry on a first date and end up with positive results if you play your cards well enough... but if you try a ballad on anything before the 10th date you are probably going to regret it. I would also recommend not sending poetry via the mail before you are married, and at that point that would be pointless, so just never do it.
Rashiminos
Fool Prophet
If you just looked up a woman's picture online, it's probably too soon.
In the first poem, the last three lines are the poem. Scrap all the rest. The second is very romantic, but it should not be sent too soon. Make sure you like each other a lot before you send it.
Exactly. The best poems will reflect the times you have with her and not be just random poems that could be sent to anyone. They become touch stones for remembering. Keepsakes.
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